Review Detail of Daoist_Urimiku in lets wait till everything is fine

The first chapter is short, as in, it doesn't have a single complete sentence, so it looks like a really long run-on sentence/paragraph without punctuation to end the paragraph, but overall the paragraph itself is only a few lines and the amount of spelling errors do not seem to help. Usage of Middle English words like Neverless (short form of Nevertheless) are present, but I do not see how it contributes to this story. Not bad for your first effort in writing a story. However it does not meet professionally published standards.