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Item: My brother's friend
Rating: 3.2

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AsphantLv45yrAsphant

The writing is satisfactory. It doesn't make me furrow my brows unlike most originals out there. There are obvious grammatical mistakes but some aren't really too noticeable. However, I suggest that you still fix them to increase the chance of a reader immersing themselves in your story. If you know what I mean. The story flows okay so far. I can't really tell since you only have like 6 chapters which is far from enough to even make a tentative judgment The characters... too cliche. It's not that I hate them, it's just because that there's really nothing else to describe them.

My brother's friend

Nzoputa

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NzoputaAuthorNzoputa

I understand your views and I guess its cause of the fact that there are only 6 chapters, I already addressed the issue below. But thanks and I'll do my best to improve on them uwu

5yr

NzoputaAuthorNzoputa

Hi, what would you suggest I do to improve on my story and fix this cliche issue.

5yr

NzoputaAuthorNzoputa

Yes about Auntie Chen's place, it was deliberate, but for no specific reasons. Thanks for the corrections you pointed out, I'll work on them. Please I would like to hear some more suggestions on how to improve on my novel.

5yr

AsphantLv4Asphant

Character designs are entirely up to the author, obviously cause they are the main pillars of the story. And to flesh them out, the author has to put themselves into that particular character's situation based on its personality. And what I mean by that, the character only acts within the range of its nature. This is how I do my characters, hopefully you get the idea. Goodluck!

Nzoputa:Hi, what would you suggest I do to improve on my story and fix this cliche issue.

5yr

NzoputaAuthorNzoputa

Thanks, I do.

Asphant:Character designs are entirely up to the author, obviously cause they are the main pillars of the story. And to flesh them out, the author has to put themselves into that particular character's situation based on its personality. And what I mean by that, the character only acts within the range of its nature. This is how I do my characters, hopefully you get the idea. Goodluck!

5yr

NzoputaAuthorNzoputa

I already updated my novel, can you please check it out and tell me what you think.

Asphant:Character designs are entirely up to the author, obviously cause they are the main pillars of the story. And to flesh them out, the author has to put themselves into that particular character's situation based on its personality. And what I mean by that, the character only acts within the range of its nature. This is how I do my characters, hopefully you get the idea. Goodluck!

5yr

NzoputaAuthorNzoputa

Thank you s much for your review, glad you liked it.

Asphant:Character designs are entirely up to the author, obviously cause they are the main pillars of the story. And to flesh them out, the author has to put themselves into that particular character's situation based on its personality. And what I mean by that, the character only acts within the range of its nature. This is how I do my characters, hopefully you get the idea. Goodluck!

5yr