Review Detail of dusty_angel in Tales of the Supremes

Lovely story concept! I'm so used to transmigration novels, so a time-traveling novel is quite fresh! Writing: 4/5 The grammar is fairly good. I've noticed very few mistakes in this aspect. The writing itself could use some polishing though. Some phrases could be worded better to create a smoother flow. One thing I want to point out is to keep the verb tenses consistent throughout the story. Sometimes the author switches from past tense to present tense in the same sentence. During the dialogues, the author should use the present tense. During the explaining and text, the author should use the past tense. Despite this mistake though, the author manages to make the story easy to understand. It's just a bit difficult to read. Stability of Updates: 5/5 Not much to complain here. Viola! Story Development: 4/5 The plot is interesting, but may feel a bit rushed at times. It is good to get the plot moving, but I would love some more explanation about the world and people. I would also love to know what about the future the MC knows. Character Design: 4/5 I love the character interactions, especially between the Vice-Heads. However, the characters could use some elaboration and imagery though. Like, there are many characters, and therefore, many names. The author doesn't provide any information on their appearances, so I can't get a picture of the characters in my head. Sometimes I get lost in the dialogues. World Background: 4/5 Interesting world, I must say! Unlike the characters, there are more details describing the setting, but again, it could use more elaboration. It's good that the author isn't using the textbook dump method to build the world though. Overall, the story is a good pick. The writing just needs some proofreading and editing and the characters just needs to be described more. Keep up the good work!