Review Detail of chonnie in Tales of the Supremes

I've read this novel up to Chapter 11. Here are my thoughts. Writing Quality: There are a few errors when it comes to this. Maybe the author can have a friend proofread or edit for them before posting. There are times where there are missing quotation marks, which makes it difficult to understand what he/she is trying to portray. Maybe downloading the grammarly plugin will help since I'm pretty reliant on that now for spelling errors or missing commas. Another thing, the dialogue for some characters don't necessarily seem to fit them? That might just be me though, but their speech does not play into my idea of how they'd interact with each other (of course, i write mostly about settings in the past. so the dialouge i'm used to writing is a little more formal). Stability of Updates: No complaints here really. Story Development: There are times when I found it pretty fast, but also times when I found it a little dragging. Especially during the introduction of the heads, etc. I wasn't super invested into that. I was more invested during the periods of Tala's battle scenes or when she's interacting with her peers. If author can recreate the engaging quality of those scenes, it would benefit the book quite well. Story Development: This was affected quite a bit by the writing quality. There were some parts that were fine, which let me totally understand what was happening. Unfortunately, there were some parts I had to skim because I couldn't really understand. I understand the overall premise of everything that's happening so far. I found myself feeling more invested during the initial chapters (although, the later chapters were a lot more polished in terms of editing). I think author will eventually find the best mix to help out with the flow. Overall, there was a sense of intrigue that I felt when I was reading through the story. Character Design: I can understand where Tala gets her arrogance/confidence from (reincarnation does that). Taking into account her past life, she still acts like a kid. I'm not sure how I feel about that, since she's already choosing to make big moves so early in the story. I'm kind of turned off and on about it at the same time? I think I prefer Adasa's character compared to Tala. There may be a childishness to him because he's like about fourteen as well, but he seems to be pretty mature and level headed for now. Yes, he has the stints against Tala but that's excusable to me because he is a child. Hopefully, the other characters to be featured will be further developed as well! I'm interested in seeing how the relationships with the different guardian classes and heads move the story. I'm also excited to see how Tala's fate plays into everything since she gave up her golden light source to Adasa which doesn't seem like she's done before (we'll see, I guess). aLSO can we just— rivals to lovers, anyone?? Please??? World Building: A little bit info-dumpy, but I dot the gist of it. I hope it's delved into more. The most significant aspect I liked was of the Narra Tree and