Review Detail of Royal_Lurkers in DELETING

Writing this after reading 200+ chapters of this... the premise is good, but the lack of detail in the character/plot development is slightly painful. The cultivation style coupled with ‘will/intent’ comprehension is relatively unique, however the description as to how Dyon develops his understanding of ‘will’ is superficial and doesn’t convey any sense of wonder/profoundness beyond the first few chapters. By expanding on how ‘will’ manifestations interact with reality, it would make Dyon’s choice to enter conflict with others have more impact - it feels like this is poorly explained so that the author free reign to let him Mary Sue his way out of pretty much any situation. The reason why Dyon doesn’t cultivate in the essence gathering system is only clear after the role of faith seeds/God constitutions in maturing meridians is explained (around chapter 190) - nothing would have been lost in explaining this earlier in the novel when he decides to focus on will comprehension and soul cultivation. Honestly the way characters are introduced and interact with eachother are disappointing. Dyon’s convictions are thrown out far too suddenly - there’s not need to declare that he’s going to protect the girls he loves/his friends from any threat before he actually develops a meaningful relationship with them or encounters a source of danger? He’s not had a #tragicbackstory or other discernable motivation explained enough to show why he gets so rapidly attached to complete strangers to the detriment of himself. The factions/pillars of the academy initially have the potential to be a sufficient source of intrigue/plot development, but the way in which they’re dismissed to being “branches” of much bigger clans that are in contention for control of their universe/others is poorly done - there’s no showing of the power disparity between branch/core factions and the way Dyon can act with relative impunity to both of these very early on in the story is ridiculous. I think this story could be vastly improved if there was more effort put into giving characters substance as opposed to making them race towards a grand stage where celestial beings are in conflict...