Review Detail of A_Shameless_Loli in RWBY: A Man With A System

The story is subpar decent however nothing really new happens and its has a very *******ish fan-fic format where in the order : Mc interacts with the pre-existing cast we know and enjoy -> Deals with pre-existing conflits/fights already shown in the story -> train which usually goes in a short time skip and shows the end result i.e mc more broken . So on so forth, Has some harem elements however the MC is not really a huge fan of it so something I respect. No innovative new powers just normal cliche power of the MC ( tbh can't expect much from a fan-fics so its not that bad its not broken broken OP so something I have no problems with it ) But my biggest discomfort? writing quality !! A unoriginal cliche joke can still be exceptionally funny if the presentation is done well . The story lacks the feeling of liveliness and emotional attachments and that the MC is so .... blank despite being a fan-fic where the main attraction is the MC and how we come to relate to him ... It feels like the author is not trying to expand on anything other then what has been told in the anime ( and hell i have not even watched the original yet I can feel it ) expect the parts where the MC conveniently meets like all the RWBY member in like idk 1 year ? how he met one of them that got kidnapped... while in the way to met the other member...and one near his house while they were being chased down... hell even most Chinese MC ain't this freaking lucky. I my self have prior to none knowledge of RWBY except for these fan-fics yet I feel that I my self would have a better bloody reaction than the MC And yes the MC is apparently a huge fan of RWBY and there are some times where be breaking his blank-personality and fanboys about the Cast yet... they feel so half-baked as if they are just monologues to remind the readers that they hold A special role in the story .(which hey I am not complaining about since I can't differentiate between a background character and imp one in this story ) By blank stale/personality I mean he has no set defined personality and more like a personality suited for what every the author wants for the atmosphere/mood of that paragraph, My biggest problem?? the grammar.... sometimes there are basic words like "are" missing.. its as if the author is typing out his mind and then as revision skims through the page and perhaps add some depth to the story... that's how I genially feel like when I read this fanfics.... So basically a NO for me , if the grammar perhaps improves then maybe cause the author has to realized Fan-fics are not a very demanding work compared to writing from scratch as the world , character and plot is pre-established and the reason fan-fics are popular are because people want to see the "what if a different path was taken" so instead of mindlessly writing down what you think and adding nothing new added to story expect for one new character that we feel no attachment .For the story does not feel like its a MC in a anime world but more like a A blank op slate added to the story and this is his perspective.