Review Detail of DeJeL in Retired Emperor

*Remember, this review is based on the first 5 chapters* *I will delete this and redo it if I find out the novel is complete, else-wise my review stands* Constructive Criticism: You should try to come up with a regular schedule you can maintain, and always tell your readers if for some reason you need to go onto a break. At the end of Chapter 5 you said ""Sorry but I don't hit girls" said Yang Chen.", I feel that this would cause a plot hole, however if you changed it to be ""Sorry but I don't hit girls" mumbled Yang Chen." or ""Sorry but I don't hit girls" thought Yang Chen." then it'd be fine. Lastly, I feel that saying names of people all the time w/in the English culture is redundant, you should replace it more often with he or she when it's not what the characters are saying or thinking, use names only when there are more than one of the same gender you could be talking about.;,;. Positive Feedback: Well written plot, characters, and world.;,;. Personal Feedback: If you reply to my question that replied to a comment you put on another review with either "Complete" or "Hiatus" I will finish this novel, if you reply with "Dropped" I see no point due to not wanting to start a novel only to have it drop in the middle of everything.;,;. Score: WQ 4/5 SoU 3/5 Rest 5/5