Review Detail of Imrael in The System of a Vampire
Review detail
Well so far I'm a chapter 15 I couldn't read anymore the story feels like it came out of someone with either amnesia or has Alzheimer and I mean literally it's like a novelty for me this author is in a category of his own which I have just discovered let me explain: the lack of details which you will see a lot lacking literally, the inconsistencies, the explanations that come chapters after where they are supposed to be I think this is where the Alzheimer part comes in, the stupidity more than normal, the lack of explanation in every part of the MC'S life, and the concept of the story is however the author likes it to be for example if you want to write some s*** beside a reasonable paragraph he does it with no explanation probably because that's how his brain works I don't know how people keep reading this s*** maybe for passing time or whatever but for me my brain can't take it each time I think the author will change I stand disappointed whoever is enjoying the story is either never read a good story or their brain work the same as the author these are the only two reasonable explanations I can find to anyone who says otherwise you're either one or the other of these categories or a new category I don't know (try imagining somebody having to choose between you and a degenerate to give their powers to and what he does is giving super powers to the degenerate instead of you now tell me how the f*** you'll feel that is exactly how I'm feeling when I made this review) the concept has potential however the author screws it up and this is a special one as I said he's in a league of his own first time seeing this kind of screw up I mean I seen others but this is in a league of its own my advice don't read it this is just an advice go with your own risk 😑😑😑
The System of a Vampire
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Person who left comment punctuation would help. Also most of your review was as repetitive as I'm Really a superstar with no example. Give an example of why it's bad that's like me saying that the person who gave this review never read it in the first place. Also I have not read the story I wait till few hundred chapters, and also read many of the authentic reviews with the negatives to decide
Well in terms of the writing I'm using a voice writing app it makes mistakes second I don't need you to trust my review cuz if you had enough brain you would have read your story and realized your mistakes doesn't take a genius to know the inconsistencies in your novel the fact that you don't even realize that is it itself a ...... As someone who read a lot of novels your mistakes are easy to perceive maybe you should read some of the good novels and compare them with yours hopefully you'll see your mistake a big if ( one more thing when making the novel you try to make it as real as possible so people can imagine themselves in it and enjoy the reading a lot of authors don't realize that when they're making their story before making a story imagine you create in the world and in that world the story will begin and when creating a world like that try to make it as realistic as possible one of the most important parts is the credibility of the characters personalities and each character's personality shaped by their growth environment...... It takes a lot of time to explain all this and I don't have it have a good day)
Ahtu_Flagg:For someone who complains so much about writing, your own writing is rather... Well it has no sentence structure, and shows very little understanding for grammar. Not sure I care for your judgement... You could be right, but it would change nothing. Can't trust your reviews.
Okay, even less believeable now. The spelling and grammar mistakes I've seen here, are not the kind of mistakes such an app would make. Thanks for confirming my suspicions, I will check this novel out, at a later date. Might be great.
Imrael:Well in terms of the writing I'm using a voice writing app it makes mistakes second I don't need you to trust my review cuz if you had enough brain you would have read your story and realized your mistakes doesn't take a genius to know the inconsistencies in your novel the fact that you don't even realize that is it itself a ...... As someone who read a lot of novels your mistakes are easy to perceive maybe you should read some of the good novels and compare them with yours hopefully you'll see your mistake a big if ( one more thing when making the novel you try to make it as real as possible so people can imagine themselves in it and enjoy the reading a lot of authors don't realize that when they're making their story before making a story imagine you create in the world and in that world the story will begin and when creating a world like that try to make it as realistic as possible one of the most important parts is the credibility of the characters personalities and each character's personality shaped by their growth environment...... It takes a lot of time to explain all this and I don't have it have a good day)
I love people like you ! all these idiotic , ass suckers on here giving 5 star reviews To cliche novels are like “OMG I LOVE LOVE LOVE 😍😍😍😍❤️❤️😍 YOU’RE SHAMELESS AUTHOR MAKE MORE 😂😂😂❤️😍😍” I need authentic reviews that point out the mistakes of a novel most of Novels I’ve been looking at on here are pretty much cliche im very picky when it comes to my novels I need it to make sense not just something that comes out of the blue and so already used out 🤦♀️ & I don’t know why people even got mad at you, you was just giving a authentic review giving constructive criticism.. and thank you I figured out if I wanna read this..
Imrael:Well in terms of the writing I'm using a voice writing app it makes mistakes second I don't need you to trust my review cuz if you had enough brain you would have read your story and realized your mistakes doesn't take a genius to know the inconsistencies in your novel the fact that you don't even realize that is it itself a ...... As someone who read a lot of novels your mistakes are easy to perceive maybe you should read some of the good novels and compare them with yours hopefully you'll see your mistake a big if ( one more thing when making the novel you try to make it as real as possible so people can imagine themselves in it and enjoy the reading a lot of authors don't realize that when they're making their story before making a story imagine you create in the world and in that world the story will begin and when creating a world like that try to make it as realistic as possible one of the most important parts is the credibility of the characters personalities and each character's personality shaped by their growth environment...... It takes a lot of time to explain all this and I don't have it have a good day)
I crown you the King of Run On Sentences! Hear thee, hear thee. Bow before your lord; The ever mighty Illiterate! He be'ith (Beith?) the man who knows not a period or a comma! Emotions flow from his fingers like the dew off the morn blueberry bushes leaves, but never will you find him using a Full Stop! Hear his first command! i command you thus off with the head of any man who ends a sentence "Wait, what?" Mumbled the very confused Daoist_Dan. "You're just a joke, a gag I'm using to poke fun! You can't do this!" I said off with his literate hea... - Yeah, I'm going to stop here before this really gets going. Seriously though, at least use the proper punctuation (To the best of your ability anyway) when you're flaming someone elses writing. It's only going to invite people to make fun of you for the irony of it. Even a crappy storyteller who can't hold a narrative to save their life is better than someone who writes like they're too cool for anything they learned in English K-12. If you can't manage to do what the other 98% of people using this site can (Sometimes despite it being a second or third language) you don't have any right to complain about the stories you are getting. At least not imo.
Daoist_Dan:I crown you the King of Run On Sentences! Hear thee, hear thee. Bow before your lord; The ever mighty Illiterate! He be'ith (Beith?) the man who knows not a period or a comma! Emotions flow from his fingers like the dew off the morn blueberry bushes leaves, but never will you find him using a Full Stop! Hear his first command! i command you thus off with the head of any man who ends a sentence "Wait, what?" Mumbled the very confused Daoist_Dan. "You're just a joke, a gag I'm using to poke fun! You can't do this!" I said off with his literate hea... - Yeah, I'm going to stop here before this really gets going. Seriously though, at least use the proper punctuation (To the best of your ability anyway) when you're flaming someone elses writing. It's only going to invite people to make fun of you for the irony of it. Even a crappy storyteller who can't hold a narrative to save their life is better than someone who writes like they're too cool for anything they learned in English K-12. If you can't manage to do what the other 98% of people using this site can (Sometimes despite it being a second or third language) you don't have any right to complain about the stories you are getting. At least not imo.
Daoist_Dan:I crown you the King of Run On Sentences! Hear thee, hear thee. Bow before your lord; The ever mighty Illiterate! He be'ith (Beith?) the man who knows not a period or a comma! Emotions flow from his fingers like the dew off the morn blueberry bushes leaves, but never will you find him using a Full Stop! Hear his first command! i command you thus off with the head of any man who ends a sentence "Wait, what?" Mumbled the very confused Daoist_Dan. "You're just a joke, a gag I'm using to poke fun! You can't do this!" I said off with his literate hea... - Yeah, I'm going to stop here before this really gets going. Seriously though, at least use the proper punctuation (To the best of your ability anyway) when you're flaming someone elses writing. It's only going to invite people to make fun of you for the irony of it. Even a crappy storyteller who can't hold a narrative to save their life is better than someone who writes like they're too cool for anything they learned in English K-12. If you can't manage to do what the other 98% of people using this site can (Sometimes despite it being a second or third language) you don't have any right to complain about the stories you are getting. At least not imo.
People aren't hating his points, they're hating how bad his comment is. I read a chapter of this book and had to drop it the grammar was so bad, but this comment is still arguably worse than the novel.
Ocean0Gem:I love people like you ! all these idiotic , ass suckers on here giving 5 star reviews To cliche novels are like “OMG I LOVE LOVE LOVE 😍😍😍😍❤️❤️😍 YOU’RE SHAMELESS AUTHOR MAKE MORE 😂😂😂❤️😍😍” I need authentic reviews that point out the mistakes of a novel most of Novels I’ve been looking at on here are pretty much cliche im very picky when it comes to my novels I need it to make sense not just something that comes out of the blue and so already used out 🤦♀️ & I don’t know why people even got mad at you, you was just giving a authentic review giving constructive criticism.. and thank you I figured out if I wanna read this..