Review Detail of TheLaserPig in Random Fanfic about Anime with a System

Well, the theme of this novel is very fun, I personally love the idea of jumping in my favorite animes with overwhelming power and just playing around. But there is one killer flaw in the novel for me that makes me a bit sad, that flaw is the rushed nondescriptive feeling to the chapters. I get the feeling that I'm hearing a quick story from a friend during break time. I honestly love the thematic but the complete lack of consistency in the description and progression of the story disappoints me. I believe that if the author is willing to backtrack and redo this novel using these chapters as a basis or a skeleton and from them work a more complete body for the story, then this novel could become one of the best fanfictions I have ever seen since this marvelous approach at the thematic is rarely seen done right.