Review Detail of AlexMercer in Douluo Dalu: Wulin's Legend (HIATUS)
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hello guys , This is a True review and my true feelings ,so don't think that i m angry or don't like ur novel , so i m replying like this. Warning ! Spoiler ! [ included ] { Many places i use ur for your and m for am . and so on . } //////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////// 1. MC and his 2 future wives r too close from childhood and i think in future too . So no solo adventure or main focus or spotlight on mc [ i kinda can't explain clearly , but listen , Like chinese or other xuanyuan novels (name may be wrong). Where story focus purely on MC ] 2. Incest , i hate such stuff in reality , as i m not hungry of lust , i love my sisters so it's kinda hard to read such things for me. 3. MC too weak , even 3 wishes he literally wasted them. i understand author is trying to make him look not too OP. then don't give such options to begin with only to make him look like an idiot, 4. Of course i know in future he will be da*mn OP and fuc**g strong and may become GOD or you know ( like hongmeng ruler or such a thing which no one have ever reach ) 5. But what we want to see is present , not future. few people will like your story , but for me it's just bad or nuisance , so i m dropping 6. Same line died by truck kun All family died by spirit hall , at least for god sake try something new. this line has become too common. ( i have read many same fan-fic ) 7. Author try to make mc Cold but loving. Ruthless but not over the line. Girl or wives or GF intro should be there but dont force story on base of S*X ( at age of 12 lets loose virginity wtf ). Try to write good content instead of random lines and wasting your precious time on something useless ( at least for me , peace ) 8. Give us a picture of his adventure not random talks and famous cliche and same old lines in case of Fan-Fic , try to improve your creativity ( which i think you r in urgent nee ) . 9. Girl or wives or GF should be there but don't involve so much that it started looking like Romeo Juliet or lover story ok , or some S*X drama . They should appear but not in whole story. 10 MC should adventure alone and make new friends , gf ,wives. Of course dont forget old ones . meat them again in some places , fight along then go on [ just like most of the NOVELS ] Author if ur feeling hurt , i m sorry . But what i said is truth acc. to me , so don't take it on heart and work hard . i believe u will improve and be successful I want to give all the guys an example [ especially to authors who r reading it right now ] The Strongest Legend Of Dragon Ball [ i read it on LNMTL ] but guys have u read it If yes , u will be able to understand what i m going to talk [ https://lnmtl.com/novel/the-strongest-legend-of-dragon-ball ] LINK above A very Cool and Good and Best novel which is ruined by Author like that he would have no idea himself So don't rad it In this MC gf are 2 , later he married both. But main problem whole story around 1000+ Even 1 ch. rarely left where these 2 girls mentioned i not there. Even in final big fight which concern complete universe , these girls were fighting alongside. I just have one plea at least if someone like to make such novel at least mention a tag : Multiple MC or something alike otherwise after sometime it's truly frustrating. OK author i hope u will improve Thanks for reading it all guys now u can go [ Just go man ? ] Bye
Douluo Dalu: Wulin's Legend (HIATUS)
The_Wulin
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Its just his girlfriends or wife fight alongside with him for whole novel from ch 1 to last and r equally strong compare to him. so who is MC i m kinda confuse MC + Wife + S*x + Romance related things should not be too much that it started being getting on your nerves as maybe you will not want to go bathroom again. { Just a Joke }.
Alright, I'm not an actual author so I don't mind not being very professional. The only thing I promised in this story was good spelling, which I think I covered. The MC and girls are close at the beginning with no solo adventures because who really wants to see a rank 11 Spirit Master going on a picnic to a Spirit Forest. It's a fanfic so you probably shouldn't think too highly of my creativity, and I don't like MC that are overpowered since birth. The three wishes are what I think are best for a longer story as otherwise I would have 1 chapter of birth, 1 chapter of strong, 3 chapters of se.x and 1 chapter of killing the final boss. Truck-sama is a beast, so he will never get old. It's used often because it's a popular thing. that's like telling an anime to not use typical -dere's. As for the se.x stuff, I have no excuse. I'm just a horn.y bast.ard. Also, I really like The Strongest Legend of Dragon Ball, so I don't think it was ruined at all. Sorry that you don't like the novel, but it is impossible to satisfy everyone. Thanks for your review...
The_Wulin:Alright, I'm not an actual author so I don't mind not being very professional. The only thing I promised in this story was good spelling, which I think I covered. The MC and girls are close at the beginning with no solo adventures because who really wants to see a rank 11 Spirit Master going on a picnic to a Spirit Forest. It's a fanfic so you probably shouldn't think too highly of my creativity, and I don't like MC that are overpowered since birth. The three wishes are what I think are best for a longer story as otherwise I would have 1 chapter of birth, 1 chapter of strong, 3 chapters of se.x and 1 chapter of killing the final boss. Truck-sama is a beast, so he will never get old. It's used often because it's a popular thing. that's like telling an anime to not use typical -dere's. As for the se.x stuff, I have no excuse. I'm just a horn.y bast.ard. Also, I really like The Strongest Legend of Dragon Ball, so I don't think it was ruined at all. Sorry that you don't like the novel, but it is impossible to satisfy everyone. Thanks for your review...
The_Wulin:Alright, I'm not an actual author so I don't mind not being very professional. The only thing I promised in this story was good spelling, which I think I covered. The MC and girls are close at the beginning with no solo adventures because who really wants to see a rank 11 Spirit Master going on a picnic to a Spirit Forest. It's a fanfic so you probably shouldn't think too highly of my creativity, and I don't like MC that are overpowered since birth. The three wishes are what I think are best for a longer story as otherwise I would have 1 chapter of birth, 1 chapter of strong, 3 chapters of se.x and 1 chapter of killing the final boss. Truck-sama is a beast, so he will never get old. It's used often because it's a popular thing. that's like telling an anime to not use typical -dere's. As for the se.x stuff, I have no excuse. I'm just a horn.y bast.ard. Also, I really like The Strongest Legend of Dragon Ball, so I don't think it was ruined at all. Sorry that you don't like the novel, but it is impossible to satisfy everyone. Thanks for your review...
For a fanfic, Truck-sama is fine to use. For an original story...it feels lazy without some kind of explanation. You can use reincarnation as a plot point after all, rather than just a reason to make earthling jokes or ideas(like technology and such). For example, you the god who reincarnated you might have had a reason to do it. Or if there's no god involved, then something like fate or another mechanic that made it possible for a deeper reason(which is also why MC is the MC). Things like that could be possible. You just need to connect many things throughout the story and plan it out beforehand.
The_Wulin:Alright, I'm not an actual author so I don't mind not being very professional. The only thing I promised in this story was good spelling, which I think I covered. The MC and girls are close at the beginning with no solo adventures because who really wants to see a rank 11 Spirit Master going on a picnic to a Spirit Forest. It's a fanfic so you probably shouldn't think too highly of my creativity, and I don't like MC that are overpowered since birth. The three wishes are what I think are best for a longer story as otherwise I would have 1 chapter of birth, 1 chapter of strong, 3 chapters of se.x and 1 chapter of killing the final boss. Truck-sama is a beast, so he will never get old. It's used often because it's a popular thing. that's like telling an anime to not use typical -dere's. As for the se.x stuff, I have no excuse. I'm just a horn.y bast.ard. Also, I really like The Strongest Legend of Dragon Ball, so I don't think it was ruined at all. Sorry that you don't like the novel, but it is impossible to satisfy everyone. Thanks for your review...
And the only reason I think it's fine for a fanfic, is because sometimes fanfics are just for fun rather than trying to create something really great. I think if you care about integrity, then it's just lazy, but you don't necessarily have to care about the integrity of a fanfic. I hope I'm getting my point across because it is somewhat contradictory. I just view fanfics on a different(lower) standard, which have a possibility of being greater than the original but never expected.
The_Wulin:Alright, I'm not an actual author so I don't mind not being very professional. The only thing I promised in this story was good spelling, which I think I covered. The MC and girls are close at the beginning with no solo adventures because who really wants to see a rank 11 Spirit Master going on a picnic to a Spirit Forest. It's a fanfic so you probably shouldn't think too highly of my creativity, and I don't like MC that are overpowered since birth. The three wishes are what I think are best for a longer story as otherwise I would have 1 chapter of birth, 1 chapter of strong, 3 chapters of se.x and 1 chapter of killing the final boss. Truck-sama is a beast, so he will never get old. It's used often because it's a popular thing. that's like telling an anime to not use typical -dere's. As for the se.x stuff, I have no excuse. I'm just a horn.y bast.ard. Also, I really like The Strongest Legend of Dragon Ball, so I don't think it was ruined at all. Sorry that you don't like the novel, but it is impossible to satisfy everyone. Thanks for your review...
Yeah, I get that using a cliche plot is okay, but it should have its own artistic or unique flare that can engage audience, otherwise, it just feels lazy. It was just my first time writing a story since I was like 8, but I am growing all the time and grow a lot more with constructive criticism like yours, thanks a lot!
IdHc:And the only reason I think it's fine for a fanfic, is because sometimes fanfics are just for fun rather than trying to create something really great. I think if you care about integrity, then it's just lazy, but you don't necessarily have to care about the integrity of a fanfic. I hope I'm getting my point across because it is somewhat contradictory. I just view fanfics on a different(lower) standard, which have a possibility of being greater than the original but never expected.
