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SoberanoSinNombre
SoberanoSinNombreLv54yr
2019-12-30 08:06

AI in a world of cultivation? But if this is a system story like all the others! what a disappointment. I thought an AI would possess someone from that world, not a system.

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Immovable087
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thank you for the review!

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Buinola
BuinolaLv4

Bit lacking in death and destruction, chaos and bloodshed, or misery and sorrow compared to other creations of the author. Not that it's bad mind you. The problem is that the author seems to excel in painting scenes of torturous anguish yet he/she always comes a wee bit off on the subject of adding personalization to the ones on the receiving end of it. And as a result, there's a major disconnect between the world of the story and the readers comprehension of the events happening despite the author above average grammar and well executed usage of metaphors. A problem if this fiction is truly meant for the public's consumption. And if the author somehow sees this. Not for the aim to impose, but you have quite the potential in writing fanfics. I would recommend writing those instead, though don't if you have no desire to. For you see, the impression given off by a well established characters upon bending their knees or losing their head in a spontaneous fountain of red will more often than not, rattles the audience expectations thus engaging them in your work, as opposed to the more often than not weak impression imprinted on the reader by original characters put in those very same situation. After all, it is easier to visualize a familiar face being mauled to ruin, as compared to characters whose medium of personalization is constrained to a paragraph or two defining their vague features. That and the fact you could piggyback using the source material's plot and the pre-made world building. And so, my regrettably limited vocabulary has dried itself out within the expected parameter, i have no more words to give. Though suppose to avert certain outcomes. I should add, no offense.

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