Review Detail of Trek in Apocalypse Fortress
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Dear god, for having a high INT stat mc sure is stupid. First, she decided to start a website to sell future tech, without any patents, without any understanding of the market or precautions to stop the military and companies from finding her or stealing her tech. Then she decided it would be a good idea to use a high tech futuristic drone to deliver her projects! are you kidding me? does she want the entire worlds militaries after her? she also would need air space licenses up the wazoo. Mc even admits she knows nothing about business but still brazenly spends all her saving and credits over things she cant use without getting caught. If she just wanted money she should have taken the tech and licenses pieces of it. Even just the battery on her drone, its license would be worth 10s of billions. Instead, she is using for fucking delivery!!!
Apocalypse Fortress
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May it's because she doesn't care or needs to since uhhh... how do I put this... the world is soon coming to an end?? Why would it matter? Even if they come after her the legal system would take too long to properly settle the matter and, contrary to popular belief not the entire government is corrupt to just take someone off the streets. Bruh
Do you really think you wouldn't get spies from all over the world, companies suppressing you if you revealed tech that was even 50 years ahead of current tech? You are underestimating the value of such tech way too much. Just for an example lets go with mcs drone, it alone would get energy, transportation, computer, circuit board companies after her, she would get killed in a shadow war to discover where she got this tech or steal it or even just suppress it. Even just the battery on her drone could be used everywhere, it could revolutionize the energy industry. The propulsion mechanism? it could flip the transportation industry on its head, cripple entire swathes of companies, destabilize governments.
JayTheMonster:May it's because she doesn't care or needs to since uhhh... how do I put this... the world is soon coming to an end?? Why would it matter? Even if they come after her the legal system would take too long to properly settle the matter and, contrary to popular belief not the entire government is corrupt to just take someone off the streets. Bruh
How anyone can read a FICTIONAL novel and expect absolute realism is totally beyond me. Yes you're right in reality all of that would happen to her, but this is FICTION. As far as we know, in the world this is set in corps and governments could at least try to do things the legal way, we dont know because the author never told us one way or another, but I assume as much since they didn't take the extralegal actions that corps and govs in this world would. On the airspace licenses. No such animal exists within the territorial US borders. Might you be trying to refer to pilots liscenses? If so, wrong you dont need a liscense to fly a drone, but there are altitude restrictions.
Airspace is restricted in a lot of ways around the world. Fiction does not have to be realistic, but it does have to be RATIONAL and not illogical.
WntrDrgn:How anyone can read a FICTIONAL novel and expect absolute realism is totally beyond me. Yes you're right in reality all of that would happen to her, but this is FICTION. As far as we know, in the world this is set in corps and governments could at least try to do things the legal way, we dont know because the author never told us one way or another, but I assume as much since they didn't take the extralegal actions that corps and govs in this world would. On the airspace licenses. No such animal exists within the territorial US borders. Might you be trying to refer to pilots liscenses? If so, wrong you dont need a liscense to fly a drone, but there are altitude restrictions.
Star Trek does not take place on earth. This story is set on an earth that is approximately the same as our earth with the only difference being the oncoming apocalypse. As such I can use arguments which say that there needs to be a rational mc, not one who makes obviously wrong life ending mistakes and then is protected by plot armor.
WntrDrgn:It doesn't conform to your version of common sense... Okay. I suppose you hate stuff like Star Trek, Star Wars and the like because the tech doesn't actually exist too.
Babykill:It's called air rights not airspace license. That maybe apart of why people are confused.
Quit your whining. It's a fictional story so details like airspace are not important, especially if you consider that there's just 1 year before things collapse. Also, I'm only on ch 6 and already "Anazon" CEO is plotting against her so yes, companies have found out. Maybe military will soon as well. There's other things wrong with the story thus far but to cry over something like her plans to sell tech or getting caught is just silly. In fact, she admits knowing nothing so it's actually realistic that she'd make such a mistake. With that said, the true issues are that she should be more affected and wary once the drones hit the news. That or have a backup plan. The author also conveys their thoughts in a manner that's too explanatory at times and, personally, I am not a fan of first person narrative. The style makes these subtle shifts that can be really bothersome imo. The MC also needs to show more introspection and just be more thoughtful. She needs to display characteristics that equate to having gone through 10 years of a zombie apocalypse. Your problem (and also the problem of these other commentators) is that you've read enough novels and are knowledgeable about such things. The MC is an avg joe woman who's had to care for her sister by herself. It's likely that she's been thrust into society having to abandon her dreams for reality. Not to mention she's experienced 10 years of zombies. Licensing and air rights are beyond her scope.
Yes mc is just an average joe WITH 10 years of apocalypse experience. Which means she knows its important to delegate and find people who have knowledge on things you don't. Mc could have easily gotten a lawyer or a business advisor to advise her on stuff instead of letting loose and spewing info right into the hands of major organizations. Just because you don't know something doesn't mean you can't hire someone else who does. Even if its a fictional story it must have some sort of rational framework otherwise it might as well be crack.
Erinyes:Quit your whining. It's a fictional story so details like airspace are not important, especially if you consider that there's just 1 year before things collapse. Also, I'm only on ch 6 and already "Anazon" CEO is plotting against her so yes, companies have found out. Maybe military will soon as well. There's other things wrong with the story thus far but to cry over something like her plans to sell tech or getting caught is just silly. In fact, she admits knowing nothing so it's actually realistic that she'd make such a mistake. With that said, the true issues are that she should be more affected and wary once the drones hit the news. That or have a backup plan. The author also conveys their thoughts in a manner that's too explanatory at times and, personally, I am not a fan of first person narrative. The style makes these subtle shifts that can be really bothersome imo. The MC also needs to show more introspection and just be more thoughtful. She needs to display characteristics that equate to having gone through 10 years of a zombie apocalypse. Your problem (and also the problem of these other commentators) is that you've read enough novels and are knowledgeable about such things. The MC is an avg joe woman who's had to care for her sister by herself. It's likely that she's been thrust into society having to abandon her dreams for reality. Not to mention she's experienced 10 years of zombies. Licensing and air rights are beyond her scope.
You keep stamping your mindset over the MC's. We know nothing of her time in the apocalypse. She could have been scrambling to survive and not like some badass MCs in other tales. She could have been fodder previously. Not only will her delegation skills have only minimally improved, but the fact that she reset has made her focus on preparing for the apocalypse. Heck, to her, negotiation and/or delegation could have been needless in the future and so she hasn't thought of it. There's so many potentials to the story that could have affected her decisions that it's too early to tell. You'd be absolutely right if, in future chapters, we see her becoming the shrewd calculating type. That would just be a writing inconsistency. If the author writes off her actions as having no consequences THEN that's a problem. I'll read more tomorrow as I have a bunch of work to get done BUT if the author can clean this up a little and provide consequences to MC's actions that help her grow, THEN that would make for an amazing story. Unfortunately I've seen many authors make their MCs cruise-control through the story. As I said before, there's issues with the story but what you're saying isn't any of them. It will only become an issue if she does a sudden character shift.
Trek:Yes mc is just an average joe WITH 10 years of apocalypse experience. Which means she knows its important to delegate and find people who have knowledge on things you don't. Mc could have easily gotten a lawyer or a business advisor to advise her on stuff instead of letting loose and spewing info right into the hands of major organizations. Just because you don't know something doesn't mean you can't hire someone else who does. Even if its a fictional story it must have some sort of rational framework otherwise it might as well be crack.
If mc was just struggling to survive and didn't see delegation or improved her skills she would have died way before 10 years. At any rate, lets agree to disagree.
Erinyes:You keep stamping your mindset over the MC's. We know nothing of her time in the apocalypse. She could have been scrambling to survive and not like some badass MCs in other tales. She could have been fodder previously. Not only will her delegation skills have only minimally improved, but the fact that she reset has made her focus on preparing for the apocalypse. Heck, to her, negotiation and/or delegation could have been needless in the future and so she hasn't thought of it. There's so many potentials to the story that could have affected her decisions that it's too early to tell. You'd be absolutely right if, in future chapters, we see her becoming the shrewd calculating type. That would just be a writing inconsistency. If the author writes off her actions as having no consequences THEN that's a problem. I'll read more tomorrow as I have a bunch of work to get done BUT if the author can clean this up a little and provide consequences to MC's actions that help her grow, THEN that would make for an amazing story. Unfortunately I've seen many authors make their MCs cruise-control through the story. As I said before, there's issues with the story but what you're saying isn't any of them. It will only become an issue if she does a sudden character shift.
And how long will this take? If I remember correctly the world was coming to an end in 2 months... Do you think they have the time to set up a proper spy operation, steal the tech, implement it, and gain profits from it in 2 MONTHS?! A proper spy operation with the right safehouse, blueprints, codes, plans, backup plans, targets, and relevant background information usually takes a few years or more. I'm pretty sure years > 2 months... right?
Trek:Do you really think you wouldn't get spies from all over the world, companies suppressing you if you revealed tech that was even 50 years ahead of current tech? You are underestimating the value of such tech way too much. Just for an example lets go with mcs drone, it alone would get energy, transportation, computer, circuit board companies after her, she would get killed in a shadow war to discover where she got this tech or steal it or even just suppress it. Even just the battery on her drone could be used everywhere, it could revolutionize the energy industry. The propulsion mechanism? it could flip the transportation industry on its head, cripple entire swathes of companies, destabilize governments.
it's an Apocalypse were would MC find a lawyer and a business man... ur logic is a bit too logical, it's called fantasy 4 a reason though. The main reason I decided to drop dis book was because MC was too clueless about everything despite her so called experience from her past life nd her death itself had no logic?! 🤔
Trek:Yes mc is just an average joe WITH 10 years of apocalypse experience. Which means she knows its important to delegate and find people who have knowledge on things you don't. Mc could have easily gotten a lawyer or a business advisor to advise her on stuff instead of letting loose and spewing info right into the hands of major organizations. Just because you don't know something doesn't mean you can't hire someone else who does. Even if its a fictional story it must have some sort of rational framework otherwise it might as well be crack.