Review Detail of Majeh7 in Ryo the illusionist - Naruto fanfiction (Completed)

Unfortunately, the writing style destroys the story. Every sentence is "he did this" or "he did that". It leaves no room for world building, for creating backdrop, for painting a picture. We are essentially reading a report on a character. He experiences emotionally disturbing events, but we as the readers are unable to feel a connection, given the lack of any detail. I like the idea of the MC. I like the time frame it takes place during. I like that it doesn't center on the manga's significant characters. There is too much left wanting with this story though.