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i don't like how he's being pushed around by a 13 year old girl even though he's supposed to have a strong will and mind especially when he took care of that fake parasite system and met her the chemistry feels little of and i don't think making prakash and li mates in cowardice a comedy duo just ruin the integrity of the story plus i doubt he would react so weakly to having his kill stolen by this little girl and being bossed around by this little ***** who doesn't understand how much more fierce he is and rejecting a system she's most of the reason i hate the novel and also it just feel a little forced for him to be talking so arrogantly about his former job even though he's proud of it her reaction is a little disgusting for saying disgusting also which leads to another point of character consistency theres not a lot of it and even if they do it's mostly just the fucking irritating annoying 180 shift of the character into annoying fucks i mean i was actually pretty interested until you made the ugh as you say loli as a arrogant get's her way always character which annoys the **** out of me and i would say more but it would be more anger frustration and cursing so i raher not when i'm trying to give a proper review

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[HIATUS] I Hate Systems

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Ahahaha, this was my first book so there are plenty of mistakes I made here (you aren't the first to point it out and surely, you wouldn't be the last either 😭) For better storyline, character, plot, etc, read my current novel "So, Humans Were GODS All Along?". Then you'll know How much I have improved 😁

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okay i'll at it and point out flaws if there are any

Overlord_Venus:Ahahaha, this was my first book so there are plenty of mistakes I made here (you aren't the first to point it out and surely, you wouldn't be the last either 😭) For better storyline, character, plot, etc, read my current novel "So, Humans Were GODS All Along?". Then you'll know How much I have improved 😁