Review Detail of TomVanDyke in [HIATUS] I Hate Systems

With an interesting protagonist, fast pacing, a well-thought-out power system, intriguing side characters, and plenty of action right from the start, this is a seriously compelling story. The only thing I'd suggest is for the author to pay a little more attention to punctuation. In some places, missing commas and periods distract from the writing, which is a shame because other than that, the story is great. Overall, this one's definitely worth reading.