Everything is good but the grammar is iffy at some points. I've mentioned this via a review on chapter 100 on fanfiction.net already, but if you need a beta reader, please PM me (my main site is fanfiction.net). I'm willing to go over grammar (spelling, punctuation, etc) and syntax with you.
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