Review Detail of raffypaeng in Dragon in a World of Bears

You made two points, to address the first, I'll say that it is one of those fanfics that has some of the same areas and characters, and even takes place at the same time, however, the main characters from KKKB tend to be... more likely to make cameos or be side characters than be main characters of the fanfic. As for the second point, yes, It is a bit more serious at times... ok, most of the time, but once we get past the semi-serious, semi-"MC is bored, time to hold back in different ways with hopefully comedic results" tournament that I wrote on a whim, we see dragons cooking, raising chickens, and serving as advertisements for a bookstore/cafe, as well as an omake I did to highlight the absurdity of dragons being among humans, I think the comedy starts to show better. Maybe. I'm not consciously trying to one-up KKKB, but I might end up doing so at times. Sorry for that in advance, as well as for any times I did so thus far. I'm still new to writing, so I hope my faults won't be too discouraging to my readers. I appreciate the compliment about my writing and grammar, though I'd like to point out that you should have said "Writing and grammar /are/ good, but /it's/ too early..." because I'm a bit of a stickler for grammar. Sorry for that too... and for the long reply. I'm also sorry to everyone that it took me this long to check for reviews. I... I don't know what else I can say. I forgot.

You have ZERO problems with your writing and grammar as far as I'm concerned. My problem is how mary sue-ish (by isekai hero standards at that) you've made the mc. Her being able to "hack" the gacha at the start, her "I have everything" bloodline besides her superior dragon heritage and debatably her ridiculously early rise to S rank really feels like too much. You didnt give readers enough time to "accept" this status quo. Remember that even Yuna had to build up her reputation and power. There is also the reliance on the MC's arrogance to hand wave stuff and make people accept things no questions asked. (MC: "I am like this and you will accept me" Everyone: "okay" This is only acceptable with proper build up as anything else feels like a hand wave.) TLDR: How can a character grow if she already has everything? Nitpicks: While I'm a bit iffy with her low key arrogance, I do like find the MC interesting. Her attitude feels like someone trying to prove herself being better despite being number 2 for so long which I think was what you were aiming for. I just think that you could have done this better. I do think that it would be entertaining to see Yuna and Nene meeting up with Nene beagging her S rank status and Yuna not caring at all. An added bonus would be Yuna pointing out how high rankers are bound to the guild.

Warning: Wall of text ahead. Proceed with caution. Please note, this is still the introduction to the fic, as well as my first bit of serious writing. It gets better after a bit... like, next week's chapters should start improving in most of the aspects you pointed out. Also, I may or may not have written the first arc when I was more or less stuck in bed while somewhat rather ill (well, when am I not? My immune system is garbage). Even so, as it is the introduction, or maybe backstory to the main story, there shouldn't be a status quo. Besides, there's a bunch of long timeskips in there too, just to mess it up further if there was a status quo. For the "I have everything" bloodline outside of the dragon part, it was more there because of a long history, not to be like "oh, I have super smell because I'm part dog" or whatever. It shouldn't have much of an effect on the story, save for the fact that I stated or will state, I forget if it's been said already, that she can only shapeshift into a form whose aspects are all in her bloodline, save for minor things like the coloration of her hair and eyes. As for the part about "insert hand wave" that makes more (non)sense later, when most of the people who just accept it right off the bat know Yuna's... peculiarities. Therefore, common-sense-chan has already been destroyed for them. Either that, or just figure "A and S ranks don't make sense/are eccentric/etc. End of story" as was said early on in the main story, around the time Yuna got to the capital, IIRC. Her powers don't grow, her influence and... maturity? Maybe? Something like that... grow instead. If anything. It's a SoL, it's not meant for there to be much growth. This isn't one of those "rise to the top from a bucket of rags" stories. I'm not going to spoil the meetup with Yuna, you'll just have to read it when it comes out... which will be soon, actually. I'm due for another release (hehe... I kinda almost forgot... until just now, as I was writing this reply) but you won't be disappointed... I hope.

Thank you for those clarifications. I guess that, for the moment, I'd just to wait and see where your plans will take Nene.