Review Detail of TrueDawn in Transmigration Service
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Do take this with a grain of salt, my dear, as I've only read through the first few chapters. First off is your synopsis. It feels kind of broken to me. It doesn't really explain the whole situation that's going on in your story. A synopsis has to be eye-catching and attention grabbing, which you've failed to do on mine. I was instead filled with questions which I presume would be answered on the novel itself.
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Continuing on would be the way your sentence flows. It feels rigid, not natural like a good story should be. The way you explained things are confusing as well, in the first chapter, you started with her school, the system, and then herself. You lost me there pretty much. The dialogue seemed forced as well and the characters felt like robots or one-dimensional. If I had more time, I'd tell you how to improve but I still have to review your other novels, as you requested.
