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This review is part of a review swap and valid as of chapter 18. The story is written in multiple third person point of view and in the past tense. This is the classic beginning of a magic academy lost and a tutor gained kind of story. I don't care that it's cultivation and supposedly eastern and all that. Anyone with a vast reading experience from fantasy has encountered this start a few times. And it's the beginning -- make no mistake about that. Eighteen chapters into the story we've barely scratched the story yet. I wouldn't be at all surprised if there are another dozen chapters or so firmly entrenched in the beginning of the story. As I've hinted there are two arcs thus far. First training at the magic academy and secondly, after a quick transition where that academy is lost to the main character, training under the experienced, wise and old tutor. Yep, we're talking Yoda here, but not green and not small. And it's all very, very well done. So for the stars. Writing. Five stars. That doesn't mean there aren't any problems, but I can't award four and a half stars. Lazy handling of PoV-shifts from time to time, stupid spelling errors and deviations from standard grammar from time to time. Give it a loving line-edit and it'll be perfect. Updates. 18 chapters. No complaints. Five stars. Story. For this type of story it's perfect. Five stars. For any normal, non-slice-of-life story it's a dealbreaker and readers will fall asleep. Character. Five stars, once again with the caveat that four and a half would have been better. There are volumes of character here, but it's strangely enough lacking a little in the personality departement. What I'm trying to say is that had it been 10 chapters then the five stars would come without any comment, but at double that something is itching when I read. World. Five stars. Perfect for this story.

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Detektive_one
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Thanks a lot for your input. I will improve all that is lacking.