Alright where i begin Writing style : i give you 3 star for this because you need some re-work on this you dont need more "!" In one sentences like shiro!!!!!!!!! Just use 3 of them we know you want him look like he scream but just 3 of them is enough or use capitalism like "SHIROU!". Update : i give all my review 5 star because as original writer not even paid for it i understand your need for break or need in real life so yeah Story development : i give you 4 star because your story some time to fast pace and skip some explaination so yeah Character : i give you 4 because you dont just summon them but you alter their personality thats make it have some uniqueness to your character but i recommend you make them have more interraction on each other or to another people in your story World background : i give you 3 star becau you dont explain what kind your mc lived now what kind ruler or power house in the world mc lived in so yeah Anyway thats all i think abou if you have improved i will make another review sorry for my bad english. Good Work author
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Thank You! I will try my best to improve and explain some things that i didn't explain . By the way i'm sorry if some time it's rushed or there is not enough information but the problem is that i tried to write two story at the same time and as as such i try to no go too deep in some information so that i will not mess up by saying something else later because of the fact that writing two stories can be quite difficult especially when their worlds are kinda similar .
No problem, just try your best and improve
