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Review Detail of SecondSea in His Peasant Wife : Yao Ling

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The book does have a good premise even if it has been done before and the characters are likeable but I feel the writing lets the story down a bit. I don't feel any emotions when reading this book. My heart doesn't race while reading this nor do I dissolve in puddles of laughter. However I do like the premise and hope the author add more emotional elements to it. The author needs to create empathy between the readers and characters . Frankly there are a lot of opportunities to do so. When her mother died this is big emotional moment but the character doesn't cry or even miss her . After death outside the marraige and funeral arrangement that was her mothers wishes her daughter doesnt even talk about her. Most people want to reminisce about there loved ones. They woud at least say ," Damn, I really want to see that person again." The amnesia part is also great opportunity to create an emotional impact. Amnesia is very scary thing for people. You are suddenly surrounded by strangers and recognise anything. You could walk straight past the people and they used to be your best friends or lovers but you do't know that but that guy doesnt touch on anything except looking for his famiy. There are no emotional questions asked like I wonder what kind of famiy I have , I wonder if I will be able to see my friends again. These types of statement create emotional bonds with the reader because everyone has precious friends and family members they woud never want to loose.

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His Peasant Wife : Yao Ling

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Thankk you for the constructive criticism đŸ„° It means a lot and help me to improve myself. Hope that you still enjoy reading the novel 😘