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2022-01-15 09:20

The writing quality is very bad honestly. It is very difficult to understand what you mean and getting into the story is difficult. I am also a francophone but google translate is definitely not the way to go. Some idiom are weird. Like there is no "tutoiement" in English, you shouldn't try to transpose French things to English. Honestly some people here write in pinoy (Philippines language), even Indonesian. You should probably write in French. Also the world background isn't very logical, even more the idea of arranged marriage like in our world. Where are you seeing arranged marriages nowadays in the west? even reach people don't do it. Though they end up marrying each other because they hang out in the same social circle. For instance Prince William and Kate Middleton met in college, prince harry and Meghan marckle at a charity function, etc. Even more because there is power and magic, influence such as family and arrange marriage have less hold. As the individual hold more power, society holds less power on them. Nice attempt but it is giving me headaches reading through the translation so I will not be continuing.

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Thanks for your reviews, but I can't sleep anymore if I don't answer properly. For the writing quality, I know it's bad. But for having a good technology, we need to use it to improve it. If you find a mistake just tell me I can understand English very well, I'm certified by Cambridge with a C1 level I chose to use Google Translate because I prefer to write in French and on web novel the French user are very low. I don't post on web novel to be a popular author, I'm already living well. I post on web novel to force myself to continue my book, because I can find the book I love on many novel websites. I already think about to post the raw but too much work bro. I need to read a hundred chapter a day too, keep my gm ELO on league and learn the Russian for my studies. For the background, I can't understand your comment about the arranged marriage. They are many arranged marriage in your society and majority in the past. In the Occident, the arranged marriage is for the minority, but in Oriental it's very common. I think you are confusing the arranged with the forced marriage. Arranged marriage is a part of humanity, the last two centuries arranged marriage become more hidden in the Occident, but I tell you a secret (It's always used for many rich people, and when a parent/friend tell you to go to a blind date. Very common in the world, right ?). Forced marriage, you cannot choose for many reasons (harassment or no choice). The arranged, if you want to leave you leave, it's your choice, especially when you need to choose your partner during a party, you have many people with many different background. The earth have many Billions years of history. The arranged marriage is very old, and he cross thought the ages during Thousands of years. It's not about just Occident and little more than two centuries. Don't forget that, bro. This sentence give me a big headache to understand bro, "Even more because there is power and magic, influence such as family and arrange marriage have less hold. As the individual hold more power, society holds less power on them." I can't believe I read this in my life. When the entire people in the world are the same, except people who have magic, less than 1% of the population. You think you gonna survive in a rough world without alliance and partnership ?. Tell me how to open a good business without any partner and survive in the world of business. Think about it too, the majority of many enterprises, the founder have no right in his society when the enterprise grow up. They just want to get him out of the company for having more. In a war world it's the same, how can you make your family survive when you are alone ? You can see that only in fiction, look the French Revolution, it's the real world buddy. Your people can make everything if you don't take care of them, no matter your power. The people don't have anything to lose. Thank you for trying to read it.

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