Review Detail of opolo in Bewitching Eyes

Giving the first review as the shameless author of this novel. The story is like practice match for me. I will do many experiments in this story to get the feedback of the readers. So please kindly guide me and help me improve the writing quality, character design and story development in a way that can help me in the future. And please don't ignore my mistakes and also don't curse me or be angry when reading this novel. I will be making thousands of mistakes and I expect thousands of advice too. Please guide me.