Review Detail of ImBloo in Monsters Within: Legendary Dragon's Heart

Strengths - Your work shows great efforts being put into setting up the characters' relationships. - Concept of a half-beast MC seems interesting. Doesn't see that very often (then again, I don't read cultivation novel that much) - The writing is relatively typo-free. Weaknesses: - Character description is somewhat lacking. Aside from the horn, what does Chase look like? - An explanation of why he needs to get in the academy? What kind of jobs can cultivators do? Do they get salaries or something? And even if he gets into the academy, how does he afford the tuition fee? Or is it free? - This is more like my personal bias, but I zone out everytime I read meditating or cultivating scenes. Something about it just bores me. Again, just my opinion. Some other nitpickings: - Many expositions are done by the MC talking to himself. "I finally got this Stone Essence, now I can finally start cultivating the technique teacher provided to me." ... " The strength of my body has improved greatly, there's no disruption on the flow of Spirit Energy." I find them quite awkward. You might want to consider changing those lines into third person narration. "He made it! He's finally bought these stone essences! Now he can...". Just a suggestion, though. - Thoughts are sometimes put in quotation marks, sometimes aren't - Awkward phrasing: bubbles can also be found from his mouth (I assume you're trying to say someone's foaming at the mouth) - Split up long paragraphs. From chap 4 I see many long paras. Quite hard to read with phones. Keep writing. You'll definitely get better!