Review Detail of daoist_om in Bloodline Mage

It's super early to give a review but here's mine your descriptions are well made the dialogue is not heavy and exposition doesn't feel like exposition but you need to break the paragraphs more and try to more words in a chapter it's still early but you can also describe mc like what he wore that day where he's running to etc. It's a good start for a novel I wish it all the best.