Review Detail of ElsbroSparka in My Way To You

I found the premise interesting and the story also flows smoothly. Characters themselves are varied and keeps things interesting. However the narration and the paragraph structure need some work as I am oftentimes left confused as to who the speaker is or what exactly is happening. But I am only in the first half of the story and there is still a lot to read and it is just my initial opinion of what I have read so far…