Review Detail of SPECTRALE in Viserys Targaryen with a system (SI)

i was excited to read this fanfic, but was a little disappointed, it is not that bad, but i found that the story was too rushed and fast paced, plus the writing was a little childish. i read the fanfic that inspired you, and it was one of the best, so maybe it influenced me into having too high of an expectation to your story, but i believe that you will continue improving as you write so don't give up.