Review Detail of Brezze in Black Blood Family

I personally think I'm doing well so far for a new author I just got a notebook app and am revising chapters I'm starting to know where I want the story to go the revised chapters might sound more interesting cause something might be rearranged and possibly added unintentionally when I'm done in there the chapters will be on here til then hope you enjoy so far as always please tell me what you think so I can improve my writing and tell me if you find any flaws much appreciated.