Review Detail of Psithuros in System: Gods' Gardener

Dear SmokedDragonMeat, I'll start by saying this over-used line: this story has potential. I say this because, frankly, it's true. The idea is really clever; random dude finds OP hoe after a lot of setbacks in life, gets a plot of land and makes sure his family is set, before using an ability of the hoe to get to another world. In the world he gets a message from the god who placed the hoe on his path, saying that the god (and some other gods as well) is fond of the adorable plant creatures on that world, but that some went extinct because they were dangerous and hunted and that the MC has to restore all extinct plant creatures using his hoe and the accompanying system. This also leaves the option open for adventures to maybe to or three other worlds or, hell, maybe even help in the gods' realm. First, the MC. The MC has a name, I think, but it is only mentioned in chapter 1 as far as I can tell, and I can't be bothered to look it up. From that point on he is only referred to as 'he'. This causes quite a lot of confusion, especially in conversations, which go about like this: And he said " blablabla". After which he said "blablabla". Then he left and he went on his way until he reached the dungeon. Seriously, who is the second and third 'he'?! The author knows, but since he's the author and we're the readers, we don't know what's what. Please, explain who is who. This brings me to my next point. More side-characters have names than the MC's name is mentioned. They also get a description of their occupation, but no real personality. It's like this with Della. With her it's like, now she's angry. Now she's ashamed because he hit her with the slapper, brilliant idea by the way. And now she continues being ashamed every time he sees her. It feels really dull and automatic and like the side-characters do what the author wants, not what their personality dictates or prescribes what they should do. I highly recommend to think up some personalities for the side-characters and let those dictate their actions, rather than having them do whatever you fancy. Third, the descriptions of items and environments, or rather: the lack thereof. I know that the author himself has noticed this, but I still find it important to point out, for completion's sake. The descriptions are fairly absent and when they aren't, they feel somewhat dull. I advise you to think of some of the objects in your story, imagine them with as much detail as you can, and write an as detailed description of them as possible. It doesn't matter if it is way to detailes, because if it is, you just shorten it. It is way harder to think up extra details without making it feel like it is patcwork, than just removing some over the top detail. It is a thin line to walk, but when you do it even a tiny bit, we, the readers, can tell you are at least putting the effort in. Another point is the cuteness of the plant creatures. Why are they so cute, what makes them adorable, what do they look like in the first place. For example, the MC gets a mail from a godess, who replaced the god who placed the hoe on his path, because that guy was invited to a hundred-year party, stating that she is also really fond of the 'adorable creatures'. You could make it better by having her describe why she finds a particular creature cute, so we, your readers, can have an idea of why the gods want their revival. And lastly, I know I can't imagine how hard it is to write a decent fiction, since I haven't brought up the courage to begin my own despite a nagging idea, but I think the quality of your work could really improve if you look at a lot of other fictions and compare their style with your own. Therefore I give you the same advise Michael Bublé got: "steal from everyone. If you steal from one, you're a thief. If you steal from them all, you can call it research." This review was written on te content up to and including chapter 10. I hope you are inspired by some things I pointed out and really, really hope the quality of your writing will improve. For now, please point out if I misunderstood the plot as I described it. But also, don't give me the stuff of: "you just misunderstood my writing, I'm the almighty author and all you puny readers should read and intrepret the book exactly as I demand it. Mwuahahahah!" Please. Sincerely, Psithuros