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2019-09-07 13:04

This isn't your typical reincarnation story. Which is pretty great in my opinion. If you enjoy stories about war or anything related to the romance of the three kingdoms. You would enjoy this story despite its flaws. The main character isn't extremely over powered and the author was able to devise a proper balancing mechanic in the beginning. If I only read the first half of the story I would've of given it a 5.0. The reason why I had to rate it a lower level is because of several reasons. The first reason is the main character is starting to become a different person. In the beginning of the story you are introduced to a main character that understand he isn't a genius. He has to be cautious and mindful of all his actions. Its the reason why he spent so much time and effort to recruit capable strategists. He gathers information, asks for opinions before he makes any major decisions. Yet, now the main character no longer asks for their opinions and makes rash decisions. The second reason is the main character doesn't exactly understand how the mechanisms of this world actually work. Neither does his lover who was a demon from hell. Her mother does and shes currently in the world as well. If it was the former main character after he discovered she was in this world he would've of asked her how the rules of the world work in order to make himself stronger and used this advantage against other sinners. But this hasn't happened which makes it even more infuriating! The third reason is a pretty big one. You know whats worse than a omnipotent and omniscient main character? An omnipotent and omniscient antagonist. Don't you love novels when the antagonist/s is able to predict, anticipate and convince every other person in the world to go after the main character for no reason at all? Whats the likelihood a person in modern earth would have extensive knowledge of the waring states in china? Unless you are obsessed with dynasty warriors, a war tactics addict or dramas from this period its very unlikely. Yet the remaining sinners are all quite knowledgeable about this period. Hell even the former antagonist that was the sole mortal enemy to the main character was. Which wouldn't make any sense with his backstory. The fourth reason is the novel no longer has any "balance." In the beginning of the novel we had a system where you'd lose lifespan when you used a skill. The "players" in the world had a advantage over the natives because of their skills, but they had to pay in lifespan. For example one of the sinners has a skill that can can create anything. From skills from other people, to gold, to even clones of other people. He can literally make anything. How the **** is this even legal. No, how isn't this person dead already. This isn't a skill its a goddamn console command. The author is nerfing the main character while buffing his opponents. Did the main character end up playing ******** mode? The fifth reason is the current plot has become so convoluted it can be frustrating for a new reader to get into the novel. A perfect example is in the story we learn that heaven and hell exists. You have angels and demons and humans can become either one after they die depending on their karma. So in that case what the hell is a cultivator? Is he just a angel than because he has angel wings? Why is he trying to turn the native population in world into angels? Why is it possible for a sinner to become a angel? With all their negative karma aren't they more suited to become demons instead? Wasn't the reason why they came into the world was so wash away their sins? Wasn't the reason they came into this world in the first place? But now without completing the game they can just become angels?! Why isn't their a demon trying to turn the native population into demons? We learn that heaven and hell went to war, but we don't know the reason. We haven't had any chapters dedicated to it either. I'm not trying to be nitpicky I actually want the author to succeed. Hes working hard and hes pretty dedicated and it sucks to see the novel in such low rankings. In my honest opinion this novel probably needs a remake to make it more palatable to new audiences. The karma thing you had with the main character and the dead antagonist would've of been more interesting. For example after he died his soul could have ended up corrupting or taking over another sinner making that person want to kill the main character for revenge. Or he could've been consumed by his heart devil in his lust for power. Maybe he could've of corrupted the angel? The angel seems to have potential to be the final boss, but in current plot shes just a minor villain which really wastes her potential. I really enjoy your other novel by the way. You might want to rename it and give it a better cover I'm sure you'd get a lot more interest that way. Its a shame you need to focus on this one more.

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DamnPlotArmor
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Yeah, it's my first novel, so I made a lot of errors. I also made a lot of mistakes in the story and was too prideful to rewrite the entire thing before I've signed the contracted, so I can't help it. I had a nightmare everyday, wishing that I didn't include the heaven/hell/demon/angel at all. As it has come this far, I have to stand being a bad author and finish a bad story, so I can learn from it and create a better one. If I can't finish a bad novel, I won't be able to finish a good novel. The remake is already in my mind, but it might not be a three kingdoms story. Kingdom fanfic, maybe? I'm treating this novel as a trial and error, a lesson, and experience for my future stories while I'm doing my best for the current novel. Unfortunately, the story strays from the sinner stuff and concentrates on the three kingdom guys lately. The hell/angel/demon things were put on hold and the whole mess will be revealed in the latter part of the story, so I can't spoil. It was my mistake (again) for emphasizing too much into the devil/angel stuff that it shifted readers' attention from what I had in mind. Don't worry about this story's ranking. It's already a miracle that it gets into top 200 despite the flaws. Thanks for writing all this. I'm pinning it.

Muspon
MusponLv13

You know what this review has convinced me to wait until you make a new series or remake

DamnPlotArmor:Yeah, it's my first novel, so I made a lot of errors. I also made a lot of mistakes in the story and was too prideful to rewrite the entire thing before I've signed the contracted, so I can't help it. I had a nightmare everyday, wishing that I didn't include the heaven/hell/demon/angel at all. As it has come this far, I have to stand being a bad author and finish a bad story, so I can learn from it and create a better one. If I can't finish a bad novel, I won't be able to finish a good novel. The remake is already in my mind, but it might not be a three kingdoms story. Kingdom fanfic, maybe? I'm treating this novel as a trial and error, a lesson, and experience for my future stories while I'm doing my best for the current novel. Unfortunately, the story strays from the sinner stuff and concentrates on the three kingdom guys lately. The hell/angel/demon things were put on hold and the whole mess will be revealed in the latter part of the story, so I can't spoil. It was my mistake (again) for emphasizing too much into the devil/angel stuff that it shifted readers' attention from what I had in mind. Don't worry about this story's ranking. It's already a miracle that it gets into top 200 despite the flaws. Thanks for writing all this. I'm pinning it.
Daoist_Matt
Daoist_MattLv10

Now I also wish to wait and see what you write next

DamnPlotArmor:Yeah, it's my first novel, so I made a lot of errors. I also made a lot of mistakes in the story and was too prideful to rewrite the entire thing before I've signed the contracted, so I can't help it. I had a nightmare everyday, wishing that I didn't include the heaven/hell/demon/angel at all. As it has come this far, I have to stand being a bad author and finish a bad story, so I can learn from it and create a better one. If I can't finish a bad novel, I won't be able to finish a good novel. The remake is already in my mind, but it might not be a three kingdoms story. Kingdom fanfic, maybe? I'm treating this novel as a trial and error, a lesson, and experience for my future stories while I'm doing my best for the current novel. Unfortunately, the story strays from the sinner stuff and concentrates on the three kingdom guys lately. The hell/angel/demon things were put on hold and the whole mess will be revealed in the latter part of the story, so I can't spoil. It was my mistake (again) for emphasizing too much into the devil/angel stuff that it shifted readers' attention from what I had in mind. Don't worry about this story's ranking. It's already a miracle that it gets into top 200 despite the flaws. Thanks for writing all this. I'm pinning it.
unknown_daoist
unknown_daoistLv14

I think you used this novel splendidly as a trial and even more so i think its still good for your 1st one...... I must say im happy that this is your first one, bc your novel "Villian Cultivator" is my ABSOLUTE FAVORIT❤❤❤ there are 0 points im unsatisfied with (no exxageration) luv your work!

DamnPlotArmor:Yeah, it's my first novel, so I made a lot of errors. I also made a lot of mistakes in the story and was too prideful to rewrite the entire thing before I've signed the contracted, so I can't help it. I had a nightmare everyday, wishing that I didn't include the heaven/hell/demon/angel at all. As it has come this far, I have to stand being a bad author and finish a bad story, so I can learn from it and create a better one. If I can't finish a bad novel, I won't be able to finish a good novel. The remake is already in my mind, but it might not be a three kingdoms story. Kingdom fanfic, maybe? I'm treating this novel as a trial and error, a lesson, and experience for my future stories while I'm doing my best for the current novel. Unfortunately, the story strays from the sinner stuff and concentrates on the three kingdom guys lately. The hell/angel/demon things were put on hold and the whole mess will be revealed in the latter part of the story, so I can't spoil. It was my mistake (again) for emphasizing too much into the devil/angel stuff that it shifted readers' attention from what I had in mind. Don't worry about this story's ranking. It's already a miracle that it gets into top 200 despite the flaws. Thanks for writing all this. I'm pinning it.
asphyxia778
asphyxia778Lv13

wow this matches my thoughts too. Very well written review

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