Review Detail of KingGeorg in An ancient World

It’s great when people try to write stories. The biggest problem with this story is however that the writer lacks the necessary knowledge of language to tell the tale. On top of it he likes to hit the third wall. Here is one big NoNo.... Never ever call the main character in you own story simply MC. Give home a f***ing name. It doesn’t matter if you develope your main character further, not doing him the ******st curtesy. A second Nono is to forget how to do some rudimentary punctuation. Sometimes you have “.” and “,” mixed up. Where begins your sentence..where does it end? Keep it ****** and short if this is a problem for you at the moment. Furthermore I think you should give yourself more time to proofread what you wrote. Not only to check for errors but also to see if you can read your own work and understand its structure and content easily. And eventually you find the time to brush up on grammar and vocabulary :)