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2018-11-15 02:14

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Like too many stories on this platform and others, the idea is great but the execution is not. I will simply go over a few things to justify my rating. First, as it should be, is the synopsis. The synopsis of this story leads you to believe that Hagoromo will be placing himself into the body of a newborn, this is not what happens, I will not go into detail regarding what does happen however. Second, unfortunately, is another common problem among aspiring authors. Forcing story progression. This will likely be noticed by the reader fairly quickly as long as you aren't someone who is so starved of good stories that you've lost all standards regarding what you consume. The third reasoning behind my rating isn't as hard to fix as the others, and that's because the author simply needs to break the chapters into paragraphs and not a single block of text. As large blocks of texts are extremely annoying, and no one wants to read such things. Can you imagine what it would be like if this entire review were simply a giant wall of nothing but me pointing out the flaws within this story? Simply unbearable no? This is but a small taste of what it would be like to read this story. Fourth and final, is just plot holes. A very common occurrence in stories, especially worlds that don't have as concrete of a timeline as some of us would like. I believe that with proper research the timeline of Naruto will make itself known to you quickly, but you need to actually put in the time to do that research. That's all I have to say, said too much honestly. I don't usually leave reviews so I figured I'd make it a decent one. Also the first reasoning isn't as important as the others, as the way it went about is still fine and a good idea. It's just a bit misleading is all.

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