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Poisonpink
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2019-02-17 00:49

It was total disappointment to read... I couldn't stand MC...she is arrogant and dumb to the point where even her age can't counter as an excuse for her behaviour.. Plot is bizarre and some scenes don't just fit together.. It kind of feels awkward and boring tbh... It might be suitable for light read(time pass) when you are not looking for something substantial..

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I picked random novels from the newly released section and read them up to chapter 10 before reviewing. I want to be fair and admit I don't typically read romance novels because they're usually very manufactured. For me, romance hinges on 3 things: chemistry, organic interactions and dialogue. If either chemistry or interaction is lacking, it comes off as a typical "factory produced romance", where the main couple are "in love" because plot. Obviously being a strong writer helps to tie the 3 points together and create a story, while for a manufactured romance, that is not needed. Up until chapter 10, I see a lacking in all that. I'll admit chemistry can be developed later in the story, but the writing so far isn't strong enough to make me want more. The story comes off flat and manufactured. The drama seemed forced that builds up to a face slapping session. It doesn't bode well for where this novel is heading if the author needed this cop out to even kick start the novel. The first show of the MCs comes off as weak, the girl was immediately compared to a "plastic Barbie" to make her look better, and the guy showed dominance by flexing on a pervert. The girl was supposed to be a fiery one, if she met a ***** courting trouble with her, she would have wanted to be the one to deliver the smack down. But she went and hide behind the guys pants instead and let him finish her off, how anti-climatic. The setting for first interaction were also somewhat iffy, 16 for the girl and some 17 to early twenties for the guy, in a bar. The bouncer let her in when she dropped the guy's name, if age isn't an issue, what about checking procedures? She could have known her target was in there, paid the driver to chase her, and slipped in with a weapon to eliminate him. Bam, rich kid dead in their bar. But that won't happen because plot (and also romance novel). Even if the bouncer knew him, either due to his frequent visits or etc, the lack of security procedures to enter a bar meant for the high society is appalling. There are presumably trucks full of rich people in there, where an accident can happen and cripple a portion of the upper echelons of society. The security should have been extra tight, always. Otherwise, no rich, child or otherwise, would ever patronized this place. There should be no way that girl (who isn't dressed like she belonged in the bar, had no identification, no reputation or otherwise) was allowed to enter. At least, not without confirmation from the guy whose name she had used. Minimum they would need to check with him first, otherwise, any random person can just name drop and step in to harrass or steal from their clients. That was why that scene was bad overall for me, but plot. Also, driving while drunk and not crashing on the way home. Again, plot. Then builds up to the semi naked bathroom scene. Also, plot. The pervert driver could have been done away with and the scene would still have been fine. She went to the bar, got stuck outside, threw a tantrum and demand for him, bouncer got someone to check with him, he comes out, saw girl who tries to punch him, damn she became hot, start her physical description, he waves away the bouncers casually and drove her home in his sports car. There's enough content there for girl description and guy flexing his monies too. Leaving his ex behind in the bar without word is also another kind of flexing. In short, a typical manufactured romance. Nothing organic about it, with unnecessary fake drama peppered in. Like the author wanted to include some excitement but couldn't think of anything good, and ended up throwing in the face slapping to make up for it. Unfortunately, mediocre.

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