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asing21
asing21Lv145yr
2019-03-14 22:44

I understand that it's not real, but the story is too fictional for me. There's a lot of twist but not necessary in the plot. The children are genius enough to have a dumb parent. I'm sorry, I might be too harsh, but nonetheless I like the story. Maybe consider to eliminate those unnecessary twist.

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grace150
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heron
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Agreed. Or make it a bit more believable. Like have the kids be 14 or older in order to control companies etc.

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I waited till we got past the chapter 100 as I wanted to be fair to the novel. However, despite me giving it a chance to develop and get better, it continued to frustrate my expectations. If you're coming here, looking for something similar to Full Marks Hidden Marriage, you might find it. Actually, you might find this novel similar to pretty much everything on this website. And it's not because it is cliche or generic (although it is): it's because the author seems to want to include every plot line from every webnovel ever. As a result, the story goes on and on and untangles on itself, to the point that you have no idea of what's happening anymore. The feeling is that we are getting more and more chapters that lead nowhere, that nothing happens to further progress on the story, that the ending is never coming. And it's no wonder it has over 4000 chapters, with how much nonsense this story - reminds me of a Brazilian expression, 'sausage-filling' - that is not even enjoyable. There are way too much characters, most of them alike, that you stop caring about who is who and whatever it is that they want. Oh yes, about the characters: not one of them is believable. And I'm not talking about being unrealistic (although, yes, they are! unbearably so!), I'm saying that they are just so bland and tasteless that you'll hardly actually like one of them - and it's not hate: you just don't care about them. Their description (always long, to the point of causing pain) and personalities are generic, just like any other character of any other novel - the heroin is so pure and gorgeous and talented, the hero is so rich and handsome and cool, the second male lead is so captivating, the villain is so evil and cruel that people rejoice when they fall down -, but it's always so exaggerated that I still wonder how the author thought it would be a good idea to include even more generic characters. "Oh, if you don't like it, just don't read it!" you might say. But sorry, I spent all of my energy stones on this novel until it was published. I had high expectations for it to be - even if not great - at least a decent story. But at this point, it's not just mediocre: it's plain bad. This review is not a flame, not a harsh criticism. The author could do a great job with the initial plot, and you can see that the main idea has future. However, as this is a translation, I have no means of reaching them. So, this is a vent - one of my greatest frustrations. If you're still thinking about reading it, this is my warning: don't. There are other cliche novels with better writing on this website. And you don't even have to look around too much to find them. (I might still check on this novel from time to time, just to see if it's getting back on track - God knows my early works are also pretty cringe-worthy - but so far, I wouldn't spend a single SS on One Birth Two Treasures)

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