I like this, but god damn it’s so slow. 27 chapters in and he is still level 1. There are things that don’t make sense, the first is his attitude towards the king. He was a gamer not Indiana Jones or James Bond, he comes off as rude and impatient something I feel an achievement hunter wouldn’t be. He is way to composed in his first meeting with a king, he isn’t at all surprised about his situation, and while it’s understandable that he doesn’t want to become someone’s servant after just arriving in an unknown world. It’s like he doesn’t imagine what type of power brought him here, and who holds the true authority over his life. Like come on do you really think a king would let you waltz out of his castle, if he had the power to bring you there, you’re expendable. It does state that it cost a lot of wealth and resources and that the chances of summoning is basically 1/5, that’s better than most loot boxes for legendary skins. TLDR great premise, execution of characters is lacking, world building is thought out, cliche in that he is going to be fighting against a super power on first arrival.
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Thanks for your feedback! I really appreciate it and find it helpful. I know it picks up in the thirties and it won't slow down from there. Also, I like using cliche as a setup; this will be more obvious in the third volume/arc.
If you still like this sort of concept behind Achievement Junkie, I'm writing the "unofficial" sequel now with a new MC and worlds. I hope I can put my much-gained experience to use so "Outclassing the Achievement Junkie" doesn't drag the same way :)
