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Lee_Feng
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2018-11-04 10:58

While I am sad that you will not continue this novel, I would like to give you my thanks for writing it this far as I know how much time school takes up. Thanks for everything you did and know that no matter what, this made a difference to someone, somewhere in this world. I hope you could make some future novels that would be longer though. Hope you get through this game we call life with a happy ending.

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HavenlyJeep
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What in the actual fish am I reading?! Story Premise (3 out of 5): - MC got a system. Got supernatural elements going on. Not much can be said. There's no end goal, or at least, an objective for now. Writing Quality (4 out of 5): - A lot of swearing. I mean, literally every dialogue of the MC has curse words in it. I don't mind but the MC is pretty carefree with his choice of words. Pretty straightforward way of explaining stuff. (Really straightforward). Grammar is alright, but need more more unique vocabulary. Chapter Updates (5 out of 5): - Check the Table of Contents. Story Development (4 out of 5): - Pretty fast-paced, which I like! A lot of leveling up in short amount of chapters. Little has been explained so far aside from playing with the system. (Mana and vampire spotted.) Like I said, a bunch of supernatural stuff put in without much context. Characters (3 out of 5): -Wow. The MC is just straight up hateful. He literally curse everyone that he don't like, or gets a little bit on his nerves. Need to calm down once in a while. A little bit positive sometimes, but a whole lot of negativity on his side. I suggest he get some form of therapy quick. World (3 out of 5): - I don't know where in the world is the MC aside from little description of the surrounding. What is the name of his dorm? How does his class look like? How does his room look like? How old is he? Important Suggestion; - Slow down a bit and describe more of the characters and the surrounding. The MC just love for me to hate him with his . . . interesting choice of words.

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