Review Detail of OXob in Rise of Hyuga Neji- a fan-fiction

The problem with Naruto SI is that no one outside of the mc does anything. This, for the mc is real life so it has to follow real life scenarios(not talking about chakra), there can be no plot holes, all actions should have reactions, dictator states should act like one, the monarchy should realistic ,etc . This has become real life, treat it as such. The story should adapt to the MCs ****ery is what I'm saying. Eg: Mc gets on Danzo's radar; tries to recruit once gets stopped by Hokage, Danzo doesn't do **** until MC comes to kill him easily. Shit like this isn't possible.