Review Detail of Lighthouse in Exodus: The Assassin's Path
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So I love this novel, it's definitely a fun read. With that said, this is going to be a fairly lengthy review. I'm going to go in depth for each of my reasonings so bear with me. Writing Quality: 3.5/5 The writing quality is pretty good. It's free from major grammatical errors and the flow is pretty good. That said there are quite a few things that could be done to improve the writing, most notably with formatting. Sometimes the formatting of the chapters can make them rather difficult to read. Stability of Updates: 5/5 Author updates pretty often. Several times a week and the chapters are fairly lengthy. Full marks here! Story Development: 3/5 The story starts off fairly strong. But quickly derails. The plot seems to come out of nowhere most of the time (with a notable exception being Ren) and later chapters omit a lot of what made the earlier chapters fun. The author is rewriting the novel though so I'm hopeful that this score will be improved soon. Character Design: 3/5 The characters are fun to read about. They have interesting looks and are fairly well described. Most of the main cast have something about them that makes each one fairly unique. With that being said, the characterization and character development often feels a little weird. Every single girl in the story loves Quinn. Often for no reason at all other than the fact that he's nice. Quinn himself also feels off at times. His earlier apathy about gaming is quickly replaced by a total love for the game, he is constantly flirting with everything that moves, and his interactions with various characters can feel hamfisted or unnatural at times. World Background: 3/5 The world's background is being built upon slowly, but there is very little information given. TAP itself has supposedly been around for years, and yet the game itself feels very sparsely inhabited and information about the game is practically non-existent. There's a lot of promising things especially in earlier chapters that hint towards what the world could be, but the author often declines to explore the hints he leaves. TAP itself also feels very underdeveloped. The fact that the MC was able to come in and instantly become one of the most powerful people in the game feels off for a game with such a long history. And the development of his faction also feels like it goes by in a relatively unnoticed fashion, especially for a faction created next to one of the starter towns. Overall, TAP is a great novel with a lot of promise. There are many parts that are rough around the edges, but the author is committed to improving the novel and the early chapters are a treat to read. I continue to read TAP whenever it updates, and I fully expect to be able to delete this review and make an even better one soon!
Exodus: The Assassin's Path
BotwaCazador
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Format can be fixed honestly. I don't write on my phone and formatting is a pain, but manageable. He seems to have improved it quite a bit in the two rewritten chapters so I'm hopeful that it will be better for all chapters fairly soon ^.^
PetraZi:You sure you like this novel? lol. Hey format is probably not the authors issue. I've heard that this website scrambles your work if you put spacing between paragraphs or indent. The only fix is writing on your phone.
He doesn't like the novel at all Petra, if you read his comments in the chapters, every one of them pokes at the story or characters.
PetraZi:You sure you like this novel? lol. Hey format is probably not the authors issue. I've heard that this website scrambles your work if you put spacing between paragraphs or indent. The only fix is writing on your phone.
Thanks for pointing it out. "I love your novel, it's a three in every category except the meaningless one." Why bother claiming you like it? A bit transparent Mr. eFate author.
XuBia:He doesn't like the novel at all Petra, if you read his comments in the chapters, every one of them pokes at the story or characters.
Oi. Go read my comments again. I show plenty of love for the novel, especially in the middle chapters. I've made like 2 comments asking about the story, and one of them is on the rewritten chapters. Don't make baseless accusations.
XuBia:He doesn't like the novel at all Petra, if you read his comments in the chapters, every one of them pokes at the story or characters.
I love guys like this, only a fool would believe you like this novel. Here's the good things you mentioned in your positive review. The story starts off fairly strong. The characters are fun to read about. They have interesting looks and are fairly well described. Most of the main cast have something about them that makes each one fairly unique. The writing quality is pretty good. It's free from major grammatical errors and the flow is pretty good. And then there is the bad things. But quickly derails. The plot seems to come out of nowhere most of the time (with a notable exception being Ren) and later chapters omit a lot of what made the earlier chapters fun. The author is rewriting the novel though so I'm hopeful that this score will be improved soon. With that being said, the characterization and character development often feels a little weird. Every single girl in the story loves Quinn. Often for no reason at all other than the fact that he's nice. Quinn himself also feels off at times. His earlier apathy about gaming is quickly replaced by a total love for the game, he is constantly flirting with everything that moves, and his interactions with various characters can feel hamfisted or unnatural at times. The world's background is being built upon slowly, but there is very little information given. TAP itself has supposedly been around for years, and yet the game itself feels very sparsely inhabited and information about the game is practically non-existent. There's a lot of promising things especially in earlier chapters that hint towards what the world could be, but the author often declines to explore the hints he leaves. TAP itself also feels very underdeveloped. The fact that the MC was able to come in and instantly become one of the most powerful people in the game feels off for a game with such a long history. And the development of his faction also feels like it goes by in a relatively unnoticed fashion, especially for a faction created next to one of the starter towns. It's free from major grammatical errors and the flow is pretty good. That said there are quite a few things that could be done to improve the writing, most notably with formatting. Sometimes the formatting of the chapters can make them rather difficult to read. That is a bit funny. gotta admit.
I wouldn't rate eFate at 5/5 either. I gave constructive criticism and reviewed the novel the way I see it right now. This is currently the only other Video Game original I follow. I've told plenty of the other authors on Discord how much I like it. But liking something doesn't mean I have to blindly love it. I love Black Desert Online as well, but that didn't prevent me from creating a hugely watched video about why players shouldn't play it. The author is always striving to improve TAP. From the rewritten chapters, it already looks like he's improved the writing, the characterization, and the world background. I fully expect to be able to delete this review and give an even better one in the future. I do love TAP. That's why I criticize it, because I want to see it succeed
PetraZi:Thanks for pointing it out. "I love your novel, it's a three in every category except the meaningless one." Why bother claiming you like it? A bit transparent Mr. eFate author.
If you think a 3.5 where the reviewer says he's happy to upgrade the entire review soon is negative then I don't know what to tell you.
JD_Zavrat:This the hangout now? Nice read. Let me read this objectively. lol. Sorry, I can't do that, I'm laughing too hard. "That being said." It's a negative review, don't bother dressing it up. We all get them, am sure the author has thick skin.
BotwaCazador:Oh god, did this turn into a forum? My happy life fades into despair.