Review Detail of DarkClaymore in Emperor of Heaven

I'd normally try to ignore bad grammar because most original writers here are amateurs, but this story has a great deal of them so I have to point it out. Missing capitalization, unclosed quotations, bad spacing etc. Sadly, there are far too many to ignore. With that said, the good news is that this aspect seems to improve as the story goes on. The author said English isn't his first language, so I'm sure he'll improve in that aspect as he keeps writing. I also recommending a little more proofreading, because ****** mistake like capitalization and unnecessary spacing are things you can easily catch even by just skimming the story. As for the story itself, it's the usual mainstream "weak MC who finds a way to become stronger." Those who like the genre will definitely feel at home. One thing I'd like to point out is how the MC comes off a little too whiny early on. From the moment we're introduced to him, all we ever hear is how miserable his life is and how how pitiful he is. We don't really see him do anything that makes us interested in him and his life story. So, that's something I'd put more emphasize on. Rather than presenting the MC as the most pitiful person in the world, try to make him do more things that'd make the reader respect him. For example, the way he manages to impress the Immortal with his etiquette is a good example. Something like that would have been great earlier into the story.