Review Detail of HavenlyJeep in Building The Strongest Human Empire(Dropped)
Review detail
Story Premise (3 out of 5): - It's a story about a group of students got transported into another world. Not new, but the author handles it pretty well. Writing Quality (3 out of 5): - The grammar and vocabulary could've been better, but I've seen worse. The author is not a native speaker, but has a good arsenal of unique vocabulary once in a while, so that's good. - Important Suggestion: Please Google for common names when naming characters. It's that bad. For example: Black Bord. It's just awful. Chapter Updates (5 out of 5): Author updates daily. Story Development (4 out of 5): - It's pretty good so far. Great pacing and enough description to get the readers immersed in the story. Character Design (3 out of 5): - Aside from Key Stroke, I don't know how his friends look like. Their hair color, hair type, eye color, burly or petite. The characters need to have more dialogues, but since I only read until chapter 4, I guess there's more to come. AND THE NAMES! Oh, my eyes! I highly suggest author to research common names for future characters. It's just doesn't fit. (I'm sorry.) BLACK BOARD! Er, I mean, Black Bord. World (4 out of 5): - I compliment the author for the descriptions of the surrounding. I can grasp what or where are the characters in each chapter. I can only guess it got better in the future chapters, so pat yourself on the back!
Building The Strongest Human Empire(Dropped)
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To be truthful, I don't have any problems with naming. The names were taken from others like a blackboard to make it into a name. Later I will set up a poll to ask readers if they want a name changeover. If it's really a problem, I will switch to Chinese names that are regularly used in most novels. Also thanks for the review, the feedback about the other characters helped me realize that error. I would probably have forgotten to describe them later. But really, I could always say Noir Bord (French) or Black Edge (English)
WriterCVL:To be truthful, I don't have any problems with naming. The names were taken from others like a blackboard to make it into a name. Later I will set up a poll to ask readers if they want a name changeover. If it's really a problem, I will switch to Chinese names that are regularly used in most novels. Also thanks for the review, the feedback about the other characters helped me realize that error. I would probably have forgotten to describe them later. But really, I could always say Noir Bord (French) or Black Edge (English)
The names aren't too bad except black bord. It's like he accidentally combined the last names Black and Bord. A name like Michael Black or Alexander Bord would fit as long as you don't keep calling them by first and last name. It was okay when you first introduced the characters but especially considering the names do sound American I'd recommend calling the characters by either their first name or nickname (don't overuse the nicknames)