Review Detail of DeJeL in The Expandables - A Post-Apocalypse Cyberpunk Adventure

*Remember, this review is based on the first 5 chapters* Constructive Criticism: You should have updated people of the possibility of hiatus sooner, then once you saw that you were not likely to come back to this story, sill let them know(this is the thing you did let us know, but you should have told us both). Your story development seems a little lacking, I don't know where to suggest improvements though... I just sensed that you didn't really have a full understanding of what you were writing while I was reading your work, and the part that took the hit was your story developement. Positive Feedback: The character design of the MC is well done, and I can already see some other characters being developed within the first 5 chapters.;,;. good job.;,;. also, I saw that you were clear and defined on the world background and I could tell that you tried hard at making sure the writing quality was good.;,;. Personal Feedback: the overall quality is not what drives me away from this novel in the least, it is two fold... I don't like going past chapter 5 in any novel I can't finish, and I'm not really interested in this story.;,;. Keep up the good work (I hope you come back and finish this novel at some point.;,;.). Score: WQ 5/5 SoU 3/5 SD 4/5 CD 5/5 WB 5/5