Overall nice story and not a bad idea at all but there are a few issues. First let get this issue out of the way the protagonist is a fairly bad representative of Deadpool. It's not terrible but not anywhere near nice party because Deadpool as a character may not work well in written form. Secondly more time needs to be spent world building for instance why shouldnt the story start before thanos kills him. This assumes that you saw the movie to understand the plot. Lastly and ironicly there is too much forth wall breaking. While this is done in the movies it's very sparse. I don't want to say this is a bad idea but it needs more polish even for amature work but I see hope for this story if some more time is spent on world building.
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