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Immortal_Potato
Immortal_PotatoLv66yr
2018-09-21 08:29

As the first Lv. 5 person to review it, I think it's good. Much better than Seion's other novels. Points of interest: DanMachi, MC, System. DanMachi is one of those unique worlds that we don't see explored often. The main character is not a cringey lovey dovey type that will bend to the will of females. He does not do romantic things. He is a uniquely selfish human, and I LOVE IT.

Dungeon System Within DanMachi

Seion
3.9
298 Chs

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Asmodai216
Asmodai216Lv12

Writing Quality: Trash tier. The grammar is awful, you can tell the writer isn't a native English speaker. It's legible, you can understand it, but a 5 minute spelling and grammar check on each chapter isn't too much to ask for. Stability of Updates: The author Seion writes a bunch of different system based stories and updates all of them with great frequency. This is great as far as updating the story goes, but it seriously detracts from the quality of the story. An author churning out multiple updates a day for different stories will end up suffering when it comes to quality and foresight. Story Development: Like a lot of the sub-standard wish fulfillment series on this site, the pacing of the story is very quick. Characters who should gradually build up a relationship with others are instead instantly won over for no real reason, and a bunch of plot points are not thought out well... Whatsoever... At all. Character Design: The MC we're given is freaking ridiculous. I personally appreciate an MC I can relate to, but I usually like an MC that has a fleshed out character. This MC fails to react with anything resembling common sense, decency, caution, or any other reasonable character trait. For fucks sake, in chapter 8 he literally molests a goddess and goes on to say that he likes things to be consensual. Speaking of, the characters from the series are massively OOC with no real explanation given. Sure, some basic traits are there, but they are railroaded onto whatever path the author wants with no explanation other than, "Hurr durr, Hestia is cute, I don't care if she's a virgin goddess who only fell for the pure-hearted Bell after he spent months earnestly supporting her, I want her to get with my supah awesome MC." I don't even care if he stole her from Bell, just make it actually make some damn sense. Then there are the background characters who just go along with this complete bull****. World Background: The only reason this is getting 2 stars is because of the ALREADY FUNCTIONING world provided by virtue of being FANFICTION. Frankly, the additions made regarding the system, the MCs abilities, and his self-insert into an adventurer's body make no goddamn sense whatsoever. "Hey Eina, I'm already level 3 despite not being in a familia. It doesn't matter that even having a level at all requires someone to have a falna, I'm supah aweshome and you'll totally believe me" "I've never been apart of a familia, even though the body I took over was actually apart of one before I got here." Summary: This is a pretty standard work for the author, Seion. Crappy grammar, characters and powers that don't make any damn sense. Railroading into relationships that don't make any damn sense from the chicks standpoint. Generic crappy wish-fulfillment fanfic is trash.

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Roktah
RoktahLv15

Reveal spoiler

6yr
ExiledLord
ExiledLordLv15

Literally one of the worst novels I have ever had the misfortune to put my eyes on. This novel is so crap it makes the human centipede look like sesame street. Jesus Christ, wish fulfillment at its finest. Author-san does the world a favor and lobotomize yourself.

6yr
doppelganguer
doppelganguerLv10

mc is trash mc is trash mc is trash mc is trash mc is trash mc is trash mc is trash mc is trash mc is trash mc is trash mc is trash

6yr
DarkDaoist
DarkDaoistLv6

not sure what dungeon system he author is using but it's definitely not the danmachi one, not sure if author even bothered reviewing the concept or simply thought fu*k that mine is better as it will bring a character from zero to hero in few days. MC automatically knows how to fight to best of his stats no matter how fast they change and knows how to use automatically without even trying. you'll lose your brain over trying to justify this sh!t.

6yr
Rahmanism
RahmanismLv4

The character is too unlikeable, with no redeeming quality whatsoever. The writing style and plot is too immature, like a 15 year old trying to be edgy by being evil for the sake of it. The chapter length is too short, and also laking in contex. And the dialogue is unrealistic and absolutely cringeworthy.

6yr
AE86
AE86Lv5

One of my favorite anime. I hope that the release chap got increase, coz this is good anime evenif the anime doesnt have stability release. Continue the hard word man🙋🙋🙋🙋

6yr
Fever_D_Novel
Fever_D_NovelLv5

Pretty fun man keep writting I love th I novel .............................................................. next chapter please fast I can't wait it.................. it's one of the my favourite novel........... so plz update chap fast OK........................................................................ sorry about the language I never writes any reviews before today..........

6yr
LonelyAlphaWolf
LonelyAlphaWolfLv15

I like your novels. I hope youkeep updating them ----------##########&&&&&&&&########------------------------------##########&&&&&&&&#######---------------

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