Review Detail of NinjaCat620 in No longer a novel.

Author keep practising! You will get better! I am no Wrighter. Unfortunately, i don't have the talent or patience. But i love to Read and i like to incourage you to continue to improve your wrighting! This will be a Very Honest review, fogive me. -First, when a Character/person Dies in Most cases they won't just instantly accept such a thing to happen, in moments like this is a good opportunity to flashback on his past memories, on whom/what he will miss and the regrets he have made. -Second, Characters/People have Feelings and actions and thoughts that you have to discribe to the readers or the flow of the story would seem forced and awkward or rushed. For example, *Opening his eyes all he could see is a blur. He squints his eyes blinking till his vision is clear. Opening them once more he eyes saw tge most exhausted lady hes ever seen. Skin so pale that it was it was board line worying and a shin of sweat and tears on her face for all who could see, however what really confused him was the loving blue eyes looking towards him.* As you can see the actions the character took and what he felt witnessing a woman whom is a complete stranger for the first time. I hope you find this helpful! 💝