Review Detail of Zedsdeadbaby in Lord Shadow

My god, I don’t understand why this story is so highly rated. Sure, it’s got a decent plot but... it reads like it’s been Machine Translated. The first paragraph of chapter 1 alone is enough to show this, as the entire paragraph is a singular sentence. There’s little to no usage of periods, commas are everywhere, and much of the word choice makes no sense. It may seem highly negative of me to say this, but personally I don’t believe that a story with so little effort put into wording deserves any sort of positive response from us. If the author wants to elevate the story higher, they need to go back and fix the writing.