Review Detail of Mdhl in Harry Potter and The Mystical Journey

I enjoy it so far ( considering its only 6 chapters at the moment), but please rethink number 6 on his formula of future goals. Don't get me wrong, seeing him with her would be more interesting then canon, just please, make it more natural instead of forced and maybe don't turn him into just ANOTHER horny character from a typical cliched fan fiction doing everything possible to get the girl. Sorry if this sounds too critical or anything, it just happens SO many times in sSO many fan fictions where the reincarnated guy DESPERATELY wants THE girl, or, multiple girls in-fact, that the story goes downhill fast for me. Keep writing and I'll keep reading mate :) Good luck