Loved it! The MC is really cool. I like Neo and Vincent too. The story is clearly different and I love the humor in the story. However, the story needs editing. you should try grammarly sites. It's good for small corrections. Also, it's free.
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LIKEThere are many free grammar check sites online. They are not perfect, but they can reduce the grammar and punctuation mistakes a bit. My favourite is https://app.grammarly.com/ & https://***.grammarcheck.net/editor/ I have used it for checking my thesis and other writings. Another one is this: http://***.reverso.net/spell-checker/english-spelling-grammar/. I hope that this helps.