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CZ2128_Delta
CZ2128_DeltaLv66yr
2018-09-23 03:39

READING STATUS: C34 ACTUALLY I DID NOT EVEN PROPERLY READ THIS STORY JUST SKIMMED ALL THE CHAPTERS. HAVE A GOOD POTENTIAL BUT IN NEED OF AN EDITOR.. THE SENTENCE CONSTRUCTION IS A BIT OFF. IT IS JUST BARELY READABLE. SO PLEASE AUTHOR EDIT YOUR STORY BEFORE POSTING IT.

What a NEET Does When The Apocalypse arrives

godadi
4.6
69 Chs

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godadi
godadiAuthor

Thank you for the earnest review.😁 you are right, english is not my native language, I only learning it through self-learning since I am quite poor. Hiring some editor would cost me some money while I am doing this for free but I will considered it later if this story could really get popular 😁

6yr
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CZ2128_Delta
CZ2128_DeltaLv6

I see.. i have read your story again this morning and i conclude that it really is good.. a little bit of editing and it is good to go.. nice story btw keep up the good work and more chapters to come.!

godadi:Thank you for the earnest review.😁 you are right, english is not my native language, I only learning it through self-learning since I am quite poor. Hiring some editor would cost me some money while I am doing this for free but I will considered it later if this story could really get popular 😁
6yr
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Kimochi_Warui
Kimochi_WaruiLv4

Why not be his editor then? xD

CZ2128_Delta:I see.. i have read your story again this morning and i conclude that it really is good.. a little bit of editing and it is good to go.. nice story btw keep up the good work and more chapters to come.!
6yr
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godadi
godadiAuthor

its a good idea lol 😁 jk editing is time consuming and pretty hard to do so usually they charge some $$$ for it.

6yr
WinterCloud
WinterCloudLv4

If you can't hire an editor then I suggest you to study the tenses of the verb , how to arrange adjectives ,misplaced modifiers and I guess subject-verb agreement . :-)

godadi:its a good idea lol 😁 jk editing is time consuming and pretty hard to do so usually they charge some $$$ for it.
6yr
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Auras
AurasLv10

Great novel

6yr
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Demille
DemilleLv5

It's a good story but the grammar is just worse. Can I help and volunteer as your editor?

godadi:Thank you for the earnest review.😁 you are right, english is not my native language, I only learning it through self-learning since I am quite poor. Hiring some editor would cost me some money while I am doing this for free but I will considered it later if this story could really get popular 😁
6yr
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godadi
godadiAuthor

REALLY??? Thank you very much I really need and appreciate it 😁 I will post my discord channel to the synopsis above please join it. Really thank you very much, I will be waiting for you there!

Demille:It's a good story but the grammar is just worse. Can I help and volunteer as your editor?
6yr
Demille
DemilleLv5

So, when do i get to see your discord account?

godadi:REALLY??? Thank you very much I really need and appreciate it 😁 I will post my discord channel to the synopsis above please join it. Really thank you very much, I will be waiting for you there!
6yr
godadi
godadiAuthor

https://discord.gg/xTmjGyF

Demille:So, when do i get to see your discord account?
6yr
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CZ2128_Delta
CZ2128_DeltaLv6

good for you godadi.. I hope to see your story improve with the new editor..

godadi:https://discord.gg/xTmjGyF
6yr
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DragooMind
DragooMindLv10

Well even the Title is somehow weird in sentence structure. Not that I’m really better at English but one can notice the weirdness.

CZ2128_Delta:I see.. i have read your story again this morning and i conclude that it really is good.. a little bit of editing and it is good to go.. nice story btw keep up the good work and more chapters to come.!
6yr
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