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This is just bad....I honestly dont understand such high rating on this one, it does not make sense at all. I wont describe every little downside and plothole, coz there are too many of them, but: World building is almost nonexisting, especialy in first 80+ chapters, not sure about after that, could not force myself to read, even just for time-killing. Magic system is flawed, and not explained almost at all, the only things said are some particles and imagination. GREAT, that works(no). Power levels are stupid as well, even exalted human mage can apparently view(or feel?) WHOLE kingdom, not even a city, a freaking kingdom! What will happen next? If even at lover level mages can easily use teleportation, at warrior mage, they should be able to destroy the world with the flip of their hand? Characters, their motivations, dialogues, enviroment around MC, everything is extremely DRY! Its like nothing ever happens in this wolrd if our MC is not involved. Surroundings are super dull, author could have mentioned so many things, even just in passing, for example weather, seasons, vendors with some kingdom specialities, festivals, religion, holidays, so many things to make a world more alive and dynamic.....Then again, maybe it is better in later chapters, but so far even characters act like robots, and the only villian in the whole world is the king. King did that, king killed someones father, stole someones girlfriend, etc. I wont even mention MC specificly, coz he acts just like some another mob. 20+ years, still behaves like a newborn. And i dont say that every MC should be fucking OP genius, that knows and can do everything, but at least dont make him that dumb and that unlikable... Oh man...that was quiet a lot....Author, try reading Lord of Mysteries, or some other good fictions, just to see what does GREAT worldbuilding mean, its not only about main story, side quests(as i call them) are super important as well, and if they have an impact (even the smallest one) on the main story, thats even better. I dont know if this is your first fiction....But you REALLY need to work on worldbuilding and character-world, character-character interactions. Than again, maybe i am expecting too much, and i admit that my standards are set quiet high. (But it doesnt change the fact that this fiction is quiet lacking in some aspects) Good luck tho! Writing is hard, writing something good is even harder, but practice matters after all, maybe your next novel will be a masterpiece xD

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I read it because i didn't find anything to read and it's like the worse