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2018-11-15 19:04

I will say this I was kinda confused with it honestly it just kinda jumped right into it all kinda fast and the main characters along with the side character development seemed pretty rushed and the overall world building was also kinda not there and one more thing that female childhood friend / female boss just got kidnapped and it feels more like she was forgotten instead of getting stronger to rescue type of vibe I’m only giving my piece just so maybe in the future it might help you better I’m not criticizing to put you down but to maybe help in some form to get better novels this one is good compared to others because a lot of others just don’t care and I can see that you have taken time to review others so you can refine your own work and I thank you very much for that !

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That's cus you read up to c13, if I am correct. She wasn't forgotten, just that the arc pertaining to her starts at 18 onwards.

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infermiteAuthor

Although yeah I probably did a bit wrong at the start, but I have got the hang of it at chapter 25 onwards :P.

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infermiteAuthor

I'll also say that I wasn't going for a rescue vibe, as I was making the world a bit more dark (Ie, what happens later), but I really can't change the starting chaps otherwise I'd confuse everything;-;.

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